Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and add a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and a brief specific detail. Avoid redundant words (e.g. "In my opinion, I think") and keep to 3–4 sentences. Also use a past habit phrasing if appropriate.

예시: Yes. My father bought me a bike when I was four and tried to teach me, but I wasn’t interested then, so I stopped practicing. Later, when I was eight, I tried again and learned quickly because I practiced every day for a week.

제안: Start with a direct statement, remove hesitation words, and give specific, coherent reasons with linking words. Mention clear examples or statistics (even approximate) and finish with a brief consequence or comparison. Correct grammar (e.g. "there have been many reconstruction projects") and complete the thought.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, in my city many people cycle to work because roads are congested and parking is expensive. In addition, during recent reconstruction projects, workers often used bicycles to move around sites, which made cycling even more visible.

× When I was 4 my dad bought me a bike and tried to teach me.

✓ When I was four, my dad bought me a bike and tried to teach me.

Use of numerals '4' is acceptable but in formal writing numbers under ten are usually written as words; this is a style issue rather than grammar, but keep consistency. Commas should separate introductory time phrase from main clause. Suggestion: write 'four, my dad...'.

× However I wasn't interested in learning how to ride at that age so I eventually gave up.

✓ However, I wasn't interested in learning how to ride at that age, so I eventually gave up.

Missing commas around the introductory adverb 'However' and before the conjunction 'so' joining two independent clauses. The tense usage (past simple 'wasn't' and 'gave up') is correct for describing past events. Add commas for correct sentence structure and clarity.

× In my opinion, I think yes, bikes are very popular in my country because, uh, recently there has been many reconstruction works in my city, so there were many construction workers who were making.

✓ In my opinion, yes, bikes are very popular in my country because recently there have been many reconstruction projects in my city, so there were many construction workers working.

Multiple issues: 'there has been many' is incorrect subject-verb agreement with plural 'many reconstruction projects' — use 'there have been many'. 'Reconstruction works' is awkward; 'reconstruction projects' or 'construction work' is more natural. The final clause 'construction workers who were making' is incomplete and ungrammatical; likely intended 'construction workers working' or 'construction workers who were working'. Removed filler 'uh' and adjusted punctuation. The corrected sentence keeps past present perfect 'have been' for recent events and past continuous/simple for workers. Suggestion: use 'there have been many reconstruction projects' and complete clauses.