Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, coherence and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), use correct verbs and noun phrases, avoid filler sounds, and give 1–2 specific supporting details linked with simple linking words (e.g., "so", "and", "because"). Keep answers under five sentences. For this question, say clearly whether you had a bike, who it belonged to, and one or two typical activities you did with it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, and I used it to visit my relatives and ride to my friends' houses. I also rode it to a nearby park most weekends because it was fun and helped me stay active.

제안: Focus on clarity and organization. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "however", "for example"). Use present or past tense consistently and avoid hesitations. Provide concrete details such as trends, places, or timeframes to support your view.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, although their popularity has changed over time. For example, about ten years ago many people used bikes for daily travel, but recently more people prefer cars and public transport. However, bikes remain common in parks and among students because they are cheap and convenient.

× Of course I have a buy one.

✓ Of course I had one.

The student used an incorrect verb form combination 'have a buy one'. The context asks about possession in the past (when you were a child), so the past simple 'had' is correct. Replace the incorrect phrase with 'had'. Suggestion: use past simple for past possession: 'I had a bike.'

× I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The sentence 'I was a child.' is grammatically correct but does not connect to the question. It should be combined with the statement about owning a bike. Use a subordinate time clause 'When I was a child' and past simple 'had' to form a complete, relevant response.

× I used uh, to go to the Jewish near here and go and visit to my relatives and then I, uh, go and fly to my friend.

✓ I used to ride it to the park near here and to visit my relatives, and then I would go and play with my friend.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'to go to the Jewish near here' is unclear; likely intended 'park' or similar, and 'visit to my relatives' should be 'visit my relatives' (no 'to' after 'visit'). 'Go and fly to my friend' is incorrect; use 'go and play with my friend' or 'visit my friend'. Also 'used uh, to' should be 'used to' followed by base verb. Suggestion: choose correct place noun and remove unnecessary 'to' after 'visit'.

× I used uh a better my parents bought to me.

✓ I used the bicycle my parents bought me.

The phrase 'a better my parents bought to me' has incorrect determiner and word order and an incorrect preposition 'to' after 'bought'. Use 'the bicycle my parents bought me' or 'a bike my parents bought for me'. Suggestion: use 'bought me' or 'bought for me' and place the modifier after the noun.

× Of course, there was uh, too much occur in our country, uh, 10 year ago, so we forget to you at the bar, uh, we, you for, uh, only, uh, for walking only bikes, uh, OK.

✓ Of course, bikes were very common in our country about ten years ago, but now we rarely use them for transportation; we only use them for walking or short rides.

Multiple tense and vocabulary errors: 'there was too much occur' is ungrammatical; use 'bikes were very common' or 'there were many bikes'. '10 year ago' should be 'ten years ago' and past tense 'were'. 'We forget to you at the bar' makes no sense; likely intended 'we forgot to use them for commuting' or similar. 'We, you for, only, for walking only bikes' is confused — clarify meaning: 'we only use them for walking or short rides' (though 'walking' with bikes is odd; better 'short rides'). Suggestion: use consistent past tense for the past period and contrast with present using 'now' and present tense forms.