Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が通じますが、繰り返しや間投詞（umm、you know）が多く、文法や表現の自然さに改善の余地があります。まず、トピックセンテンスを明確にし、その後に一つか二つの具体的な理由を論理的に述べてください。接続詞（for example, because, so）を使って文をつなぎ、不要な繰り返しを避ける練習をしましょう。また過去形と受動態の使い方を整理するとより自然になります。

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought riding a bike could be dangerous for young children, so they preferred I learned to walk and use public transport instead. For example, there were few safe cycling paths near our home, which made them worry about traffic.

제안: 意見は述べられていますが、発言が断続的で曖昧な表現が多いです。比較を使う時は明確な基準（例：頻度、インフラ）を示し、理由を具体的に述べましょう。接続語（However, whereas, because）で構成を整理し、不要なフィラーを減らして一文を簡潔に保つ練習をしてください。また具体的な例（都市名や統計、観察）を一つ入れると説得力が増します。

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in Japan. Unlike the Netherlands or Germany, where cycling is widespread due to extensive bike lanes and flat terrain, many Japanese cities have limited space and fewer dedicated cycling paths. As a result, people often prefer trains or cars for daily travel.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. You know, when I, when I was a child, it is considered to be like dangerous, like for kids to umm, ride a bike as a dangerous. So I didn't, I didn't have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. You know, when I was a child, it was considered dangerous for kids to ride a bike. So I didn't have a bike.

The sentence uses present tense 'is considered' while describing past beliefs; it should be past tense 'was considered'. Also the phrase 'as a dangerous' is ungrammatical; use 'dangerous' as an adjective after 'considered'. Remove repeated fillers and duplicated clauses for clarity. Suggestion: maintain past tense when describing past perceptions and use the correct adjective placement: 'it was considered dangerous for kids to ride a bike.'

× I, I don't think so, umm, because when I went to like Netherlands or Germany, everyone like rides on bike and then I think that's called popular.

✓ I don't think so, because when I went to the Netherlands or Germany, everyone rides bikes and I think that's what 'popular' means.

Use 'the Netherlands' with the definite article. 'Rides on bike' is incorrect; say 'rides bikes' or 'cycles'. Maintain consistent present tense for general statements: 'everyone rides bikes'. Clarify 'that's called popular' to the more natural 'that's what 'popular' means.' Remove fillers for fluency.

× But in Japan, like there's, there are few, like there's, umm, like small space and there are not that many, uh, area for bike.

✓ But in Japan, there is little space and there are not that many areas for bikes.

Mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. Use 'little space' (uncountable) rather than 'small space' when speaking generally. Use plural 'areas' and plural possessive 'for bikes'. 'There are few' should be 'there are not that many areas' or 'there are few areas'; choose matching number agreement. Suggestion: 'there is little space and there are not many areas for bikes.'