Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, avoid fillers (uh), and make the description concise with one clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use correct verb forms and more precise adjectives. For example, start with a direct statement, then add specific sensory details and a brief reason or memory to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I had a bright purple bike when I was a child. The wheels had multicolored spokes that flashed in the sunlight, and I loved riding it to my friend’s house every afternoon because it felt fast and cheerful.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, reduce repetition and fillers, and offer one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Provide a concise comparison with cars to support your point. Avoid vague phrases like 'you know' and finish with a complete thought.

예시: Yes, bikes are extremely popular in my country because they are inexpensive and fuel-efficient. For instance, many people use motorcycles to commute in traffic since they are quicker than cars and cheaper to maintain.

× the wheels was like uh multi rainbow colour.

✓ the wheels were like, uh, multi-rainbow colours.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'wheels' is plural so the past form of 'to be' must be 'were', not 'was'. Also use plural 'colours' for multiple colours and hyphenate 'multi-rainbow' for clarity. Suggestion: match verb number to subject (plural subject -> were).

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country as it's very uh affordable and easy to drive and uh it's uh, you know very economical as well and you can move uh anywhere uh anytime when you want.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country as they are very affordable and easy to ride, and they are also very economical; you can go anywhere at any time when you want.

Pronoun and verb agreement and word choice: 'bikes' is plural so use 'they' not 'it' (incorrect use of pronouns). 'Drive' is more appropriate for cars; use 'ride' for bikes. Repeated 'it's' creates unclear reference; replace with 'they are'. Streamline filler words and use 'at any time' (fixed adverb phrase). Suggestion: refer to plural nouns with plural pronouns and choose verbs appropriate to the mode of transport.

× It's uh, especially in case of cars you have to uh, you know.

✓ This is especially true for cars, where you often cannot do that.

Fragment and unclear structure: the original is a sentence fragment with omitted verb and unclear meaning ('you have to, you know'). Recast into a complete sentence that contrasts bikes with cars. Suggestion: form a complete clause with subject and verb and state the restriction clearly (e.g., 'you often cannot do that' referring back to flexibility of bikes).