Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak in the past tense consistently, reduce filler words (um, uh), and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by concise supporting details. Use linking words (for example, “when,” “after,” “so”) to show sequence and avoid confusing phrases like “he taught” if you mean your mother. Keep to 2–4 sentences to be natural and effective.

예시: Yes. I had a small bike when I was seven because my mother bought it for me. She taught me how to balance and I fell several times at first, but after a few days of practice I learned to ride confidently.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then give specific examples with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect grammar (e.g., ‘they use bicycle a lot’ → ‘people use bicycles a lot’). Use precise vocabulary (children, elderly people, villagers) and 2–3 concise supporting points to make your response coherent.

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in big cities in my country, but people still use them in some places. For example, children ride bikes in neighborhoods and many elderly people use bicycles to go to the park. In small villages, bicycles remain a common means of transport because they are cheap and convenient.

× Yes, actually I have a bike and umm, when I was I think, uh, seven years old, my mom bought umm, a, a little bike for me and he taught me how to ride a bicycle.

✓ Yes, actually I had a bike and, I think when I was seven years old, my mom bought a little bike for me and she taught me how to ride it.

The narrative refers to a past time, so present simple 'have' should be past 'had' (Past tense issue). Pronoun 'he' is inconsistent with 'mom' and should be 'she' (Incorrect use of pronouns - category 12, but only correcting items listed as per instruction, primary issue is past tense). Also 'a, a' and fillers removed for clarity and 'a little bike' followed by 'ride it' is natural. Suggestion: Maintain past tense throughout when describing past events and match pronouns to the noun's gender; remove unnecessary fillers and duplicate articles.

× And uh, I can say, uh, it's several times that I hit the ground and umm, but finally I learned how to ride away.

✓ I can say I fell to the ground several times, but finally I learned how to ride.

Use past tense verb 'fell' instead of 'hit' for 'falling off a bike' and place time expression 'several times' naturally ('I fell... several times') (Past tense issue). 'Ride away' is unnatural; use 'ride' to mean ride a bicycle. Suggestion: Use accurate past verbs for past events and natural collocations (fall off a bike, learn to ride).

× Not such as it, no, umm, any reliance because, uh, they use, uh, bicycle a lot, But uh, we can see children and, uh, most of the time the old men use them bicycle, uh, for go to the park or uh, some of the old man, uh, in the little village they're using for a bike.

✓ Not really. People in my country don't rely on bikes much, although many do use bicycles often. You can see children and older men riding them, for example to go to the park. In small villages some older men still use bikes regularly.

Multiple problems: unclear sentence structure and inconsistent tenses/phrasing (Sentence structure errors). 'Not such as it' is ungrammatical; use 'Not really'. 'Any reliance' should be expressed as 'don't rely on bikes much' (Incorrect use of quantifiers/article but main issue is sentence structure). 'They use bicycle a lot' needs article/plural 'bicycles' and clearer subject. 'Most of the time the old men use them bicycle' has incorrect pronoun and noun forms; corrected to 'older men riding them'. 'for go to the park' should be 'to go to the park' (Incorrect use of prepositions, but treated within structure rewrite). 'some of the old man... they're using for a bike' corrected to 'some older men still use bikes regularly'. Suggestion: Break long run-on sentences into clear shorter sentences, ensure subjects and verbs agree, use appropriate articles and plural nouns, and correct prepositions (e.g., 'to go to').