Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it is brief and could be expanded with one or two specific supporting details to sound more natural and informative. Add a short topic sentence then a linked reason and a brief example or consequence. Use a linking word (e.g., because, so) to connect ideas and avoid filler words like “umm.”

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling and getting injured. For example, I once saw a classmate break his arm after slipping on gravel, so my parents preferred I learn to walk and take public transport instead.

제안: Your response gives an opinion but is slightly contradictory and contains hesitations. Start with a clear direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons and an example, and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words (for example, however, although) to reconcile the contradiction between general popularity and your personal experience.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in my country because many residential areas have smooth cement roads that make cycling easy. However, in my own neighborhood I didn’t see many bikes growing up, possibly because most families preferred motorcycles or cars for longer commutes.

× I was too afraid to get into an accident to try one.

✓ I was too afraid of getting into an accident to try one.

Using 'afraid of' + noun or gerund is correct. The original 'afraid to get into' is less natural and can imply willingness; 'afraid of getting into an accident' correctly uses the preposition 'of' and the gerund 'getting'. Suggestion: Use 'afraid of' followed by a noun/gerund when expressing fear of an action or event.

× I do think bikes are popular in our country because a lot of neighborhoods are made with cement roads umm in the neighborhood, but growing up I don't think I've seen a lot of bikes.

✓ I do think bikes are popular in our country because many neighborhoods have cement roads, but growing up I don't think I saw a lot of bikes.

Multiple issues: 'a lot of' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural with plural 'neighborhoods'; 'are made with cement roads' is awkward—use 'have cement roads' (preposition/use). Also the clause 'growing up I don't think I've seen' mixes past experience with present perfect incorrectly; when referring to a specific past period 'growing up' use simple past 'I saw'. Suggestion: Use 'many neighborhoods have cement roads' and maintain consistent past tense after 'growing up' by saying 'I saw'.