Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea. Use simpler, more accurate phrases (e.g., “road accidents” or “heavy traffic” instead of “road rage” if you mean dangerous conditions).

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. I was worried about safety because traffic is very busy in India, and there were many accidents near my home, so my parents preferred I walk or use public transport.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “as MA”) and incorrect singular/plural agreement. Include examples or comparisons to make your point stronger.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many middle-class families choose motorcycles because they are cheaper to buy and run than cars, and they are easier to park and navigate through heavy city traffic.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of driving bikes in road rage that happens in India.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of riding a bike because of the road rage that happens in India.

The verb 'driving' is used with vehicles you drive (cars); for bicycles use 'riding' (verb choice fall under correct tense usage/context). Also 'driving bikes in road rage' is awkward and ungrammatical; rephrase to 'riding a bike because of the road rage' to clearly link cause and effect. Keep past tense consistent: 'didn't have' and 'was afraid' are correct; use base verb 'ride' in past context explained by 'was afraid of riding'. Suggestion: use 'riding a bike' for bicycles and place the reason clause 'because of the road rage that happens in India' for clarity.

× I was afraid of the traffic that we have on Indian roads.

✓ I was afraid of the traffic that we had on Indian roads.

The sentence mixes past ('was afraid') with present ('we have'). Maintain consistent past tense by using 'had'. The error is inconsistent tense usage; revise present tense verb to past to match the time frame. Suggestion: keep all verbs in the same time frame when describing past situations.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country as MA.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

'as MA' is unclear and appears to be an unnecessary fragment or abbreviation, creating an incoherent sentence. Remove it for clarity. (This is a word choice/clarity issue; not directly in the provided list, so only correction provided.)

× It is the cheapest mode of transport for the middle class people who can't afford the cars but they can afford the bike and can travel with the family.

✓ They are the cheapest mode of transport for middle-class people who can't afford cars but can afford a bike and can travel with their family.

Problems include singular/plural and article/quantifier usage: 'It is' should be 'They are' to agree with plural 'bikes'. 'the middle class people' is better as 'middle-class people' (no definite article). 'afford the cars' should be 'afford cars' and 'afford the bike' should be 'afford a bike'. Also 'the family' should be 'their family' for clear possessive reference. These corrections address subject-verb agreement and article/quantifier errors. Suggestion: match singular/plural, remove unnecessary articles, and use possessive pronouns where appropriate.