Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'I had a bike' not 'it happened bright'), avoid repetition, and keep sentences short (maximum 5). Example improvements: use past simple for past events, and say whether you could ride it or not with a brief reason.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me as a birthday present, but I wasn’t very good at riding because I was afraid of falling. I spent a lot of time practicing in our yard until I felt more confident.

제안: Work on vocabulary choice, sentence structure and coherence. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give 1–2 clear reasons using appropriate linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'also'). Use correct words (bike, environment) and avoid unclear phrases ('envelopment allowed', 'hearing about yourself'). Be specific about reasons: convenience, cost, exercise, scenery. Keep answers concise and natural.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. Also, many people ride them for exercise and to enjoy the scenery, especially in parks and along rivers.

× Yes, it happened bright when I was young.

✓ Yes, it happened when I was young.

The adjective 'bright' is incorrectly used after 'happened' and makes the sentence ungrammatical. The speaker likely meant to say 'it happened when I was young' to indicate timing in the past. Keep simple past tense 'happened' and remove the extraneous word. Suggestion: say 'Yes, it happened when I was young.' or 'Yes, I had one when I was young.'

× My mom bought this for me and I'm not good in ride ride a bike.

✓ My mom bought it for me, but I wasn't good at riding a bike.

Multiple issues: pronoun 'this' is acceptable but 'it' is more natural; 'I'm not good in ride ride a bike' uses the wrong preposition and verb form and repeats a word. The correct structure is 'good at' + gerund. Also tense should match the past context ('wasn't' rather than 'I'm not'). Suggestion: use 'good at' followed by the -ing form: 'I wasn't good at riding a bike.'

× Yes, I think bai is very popular in my country because when you want to go somewhere, you can ride a bike and you can see the envelopment allowed there.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because when you want to go somewhere, you can ride a bike and see the environment there.

Several problems: 'bai' is a typo for 'bikes' (plural) so subject-verb and noun form must be plural. 'You can ride a bike and you can see the envelopment allowed there' uses incorrect noun 'envelopment' and redundant 'allowed.' Use 'environment' and remove 'allowed.' Also streamline by removing repeated 'you can.' Suggestion: pluralize 'bike' to 'bikes' and use 'see the environment' for correct meaning.

× Because if you ride a bike, you can see everything without something protect you, like you can see like the nature allowed there and hearing about yourself and you.

✓ If you ride a bike, you can see everything without anything protecting you; you can see the nature around you and enjoy the sounds and the peace.

This sentence has several pronoun and noun problems: 'without something protect you' is ungrammatical — use 'without anything protecting you' (gerund after 'without'). 'the nature allowed there' is incorrect phrase; use 'the nature around you' or 'the scenery.' 'hearing about yourself and you' is unclear; likely intended 'hear yourself' or 'hear the sounds around you' so replace with 'enjoy the sounds and the peace.' Also tense/modal forms adjusted for general present truth. Suggestion: use 'anything protecting you' and gerunds for continuous actions, and rephrase unclear parts into concrete nouns like 'scenery' or 'sounds.'