Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), avoid repetition and filler words, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Also correct verb tenses and word choice (e.g., 'I had a pink bike', not 'I have one').

예시: I had a pink bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I remember getting it insured because I fell the first time I rode it. It was my favorite toy and I rode it around the neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: Give a clear, direct answer using correct grammar and linking words. State your opinion in one sentence, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid vague or unclear phrases (e.g., 'unleasher').

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and good for exercise. For example, many people cycle in parks and on weekends, and children often learn to ride from a young age, so cycling remains common today.

× Yes, I have one.

✓ Yes, I had one.

The examiner asked about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The student used present tense 'have' instead of past tense 'had'. Use past tense to match the time frame: 'had'. Suggestions: change present tense verbs to past when describing past events, e.g., 'I had one.'

× The color is pink.

✓ Its color was pink.

When referring to the student's childhood bike (past), the sentence should use past tense 'was' and a possessive determiner 'its' is appropriate. Also avoid mixing present tense with past context. Suggestion: maintain past tense and use 'its' to indicate possession.

× It was good for my parents for my birthday and I remember that I got insured because of it because umm, the first time that I the first time that I ride a bike.

✓ It was a gift from my parents for my birthday, and I remember that I got injured because of it the first time I rode a bike.

Multiple issues: unclear phrase 'good for my parents' and repeated fragments. 'Good for my parents for my birthday' is ungrammatical. Also 'got insured' is wrong word choice; context suggests 'injured'. Tense error: 'ride' should be past 'rode'. Remove repetition 'the first time that I the first time that'. Suggestions: simplify to 'It was a gift from my parents for my birthday' and use 'got injured' and past tense 'rode'.

× Yes, it is popular to our country especially it becomes uh, it becomes unleasher to the other people.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially because they are accessible to many people.

Context asks about general popularity (present) but original has incorrect subject-verb agreement 'it is' for plural 'bikes' and odd phrase 'unleasher to the other people'. Use plural subject 'bikes are' and a clear phrase 'accessible to many people'. Suggestion: match subject number and use natural collocations like 'popular in my country' and 'accessible to people'.

× It becomes the exercise.

✓ They are used for exercise.

The original 'It becomes the exercise' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Bikes' (plural) are used for exercise, so use plural pronoun 'they' and an appropriate verb 'are used for'. Suggestion: say 'They are used for exercise' or 'People use bikes for exercise.'

× When they have free time, they do a bike.

✓ When they have free time, they go for a bike ride.

'Do a bike' is incorrect. Use the phrase 'go for a bike ride' or 'ride a bike'. Also keep present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'go for a bike ride' or 'ride their bikes.'

× And also when I was kid, the bike is already there and until now, yeah, it was so good because it's.

✓ Also, when I was a kid the bike was already there, and even now it's still in good condition.

Mixing past and present tenses and missing article: 'when I was kid' needs 'a kid'. 'The bike is already there' should be past 'was' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Until now' and 'it was so good because it's' is incomplete and tense-mismatched. Clarify with 'even now it's still in good condition.' Suggestion: use 'when I was a kid', match past tense, and complete the thought with a present result if appropriate.