Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary, and limit to maximum five sentences. Start with a topic sentence saying whether you had a bike, then add one or two clear supporting details (how you learned, feelings). Use linking words like “so” or “therefore” to connect ideas and correct phrases such as “taught myself” and “I struggled while learning.” Avoid unclear words like “breezes.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I taught myself how to ride it, and I struggled at first because I kept losing my balance. However, after practicing in the park every day for a few weeks, I became confident. Therefore, I loved my bike because it gave me freedom to explore.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “bikes are popular,” “convenient,” “they don’t use gas”). Give one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Keep it under five sentences and avoid unfinished sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because they are convenient and inexpensive. For example, many people use bicycles to travel short distances or commute to work since bikes don’t require fuel. Also, they are useful in crowded areas where cars are slow, so cycling can be faster and cheaper.

× I specifically learned it by myself.

✓ I specifically taught myself.

The phrase 'learned it by myself' is awkward and likely meant 'taught myself'. This involves using a reflexive construction with the verb 'teach' (teach oneself), not 'learn'. Use 'taught myself' to indicate you acquired the skill without a teacher.

× I thought myself how to bike.

✓ I taught myself how to ride a bike.

'Thought myself' is incorrect; the intended reflexive verb is 'taught myself'. Also use 'ride a bike' rather than 'bike' as a verb for clarity. Correct reflexive pronoun usage and verb choice is needed.

× I stumble upon learning and I acquired a lot of breezes because of it.

✓ I stumbled while learning and I faced a lot of difficulties because of it.

The sentence mixes present and past forms. Use past tense 'stumbled' to match 'learning' in the past context. 'Breezes' is the wrong word; likely intended 'difficulties' or 'setbacks'. Use words that convey obstacles. Also 'stumble upon' means to discover unexpectedly, which doesn't fit here.

× But nevertheless, I love my bike when I was a child.

✓ But nevertheless, I loved my bike when I was a child.

The time frame is past ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be past 'loved', not present 'love'. Maintain consistent tense for time references.

× Yes, bike is quite popular in the Philippines since it is convenience convenient rather it bring you to a lot of places without spending gas because obviously bike doesn't need it to function.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because they are convenient and can take you to many places without spending gasoline, since bikes do not need it to function.

Multiple errors: use plural 'bikes' with plural verb 'are' (singular/plural agreement). 'Convenient' is the correct adjective; 'convenience' is a noun. 'It bring' should be 'they can take' to match plural subject and modal meaning. Use 'gasoline' or 'gas' and avoid redundant pronoun 'it' after 'need'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word forms.

× And bike is popular here in the Philippines because it's.

✓ And bikes are popular here in the Philippines for those reasons.

Fragment: 'because it's' is unfinished and 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes are'. Complete the sentence by referring back to the previous reasons. Avoid sentence fragments and ensure subject-verb agreement.