Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g. "didn't" and "did not"), reduce hesitations, and add a specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a brief example or memory to make the answer more vivid.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because my parents couldn't afford one. However, I often borrowed my neighbor's bike to ride around the park after school, which was one of my favourite pastimes.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and expand with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. "because", "for example", "therefore"). Add a concrete example or statistic if possible. Keep it within 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable way to get around and they promote fitness. For example, many cities have dedicated bike lanes and weekend group rides, so people often cycle to work or for exercise.

× I didn't, I did not have a bike when I was a child, uh, because my parents did not have the resources, the financial resources to buy me one.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not have the financial resources to buy me one.

The original sentence repeats the negative ('I didn't, I did not') and contains filler words that interrupt sentence flow. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the redundant repetition and filler for clarity and conciseness. Suggestion: say the negative once and keep related clauses together: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not have the financial resources to buy me one.'

× But I had a neighbor who had a bike and we used to go there so that we can play with them and, uh.

✓ But I had a neighbor who had a bike and we used to go there so that we could play with it.

The original uses 'can' with 'used to' which mixes past habitual ('used to') with a present ability modal ('can'), and uses 'them' to refer to 'a bike' (singular) causing pronoun mismatch. This fits Verb + -ing form issues and also subject/number reference but per instruction correct only listed types; primary error is incorrect verb/modal form following past habitual (ID 8). Use 'could' to match past context. Also replace 'them' with 'it' to match singular noun. Suggestion: use 'could' after 'used to' for past ability and keep pronouns consistent.

× Yes, bikes are more common in my country because it's a a cheaper means of transport and uh, many people in my country are health health conscious so they use bikes to.

✓ Yes, bikes are more common in my country because they're a cheaper means of transport, and many people in my country are health-conscious so they use bikes to exercise.

The original has repetition ('a a') and an incomplete clause ending with 'to.' It also uses 'it's' to refer to 'bikes' (plural), causing a third person singular/plural mismatch (ID 2). Replace 'it's' with 'they're' to agree with plural subject 'bikes.' Complete the final clause by adding 'exercise.' Also fix 'health health' repetition and hyphenate 'health-conscious.' Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and finish clauses fully.