Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Work on grammatical accuracy, verb tense consistency and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (past tense), use linking words for order, and give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'buy' → 'bike').

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it with my father, and we cycled around our town for about 30 minutes each evening. After our ride, we usually ate dinner at a small roadside stall nearby.

제안: Give a clear direct opinion, use correct vocabulary, and support your view with specific reasons. Correct common errors: 'by' → 'bike', 'buy' → 'bike', and avoid unclear phrases like 'you will have a history'. Use linking words (because, although, however) and offer a brief contrast or exception if possible.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in Thailand because the climate is usually very hot and humid, so people sweat a lot when cycling. However, some people still cycle for short trips or exercise, especially in the cooler early mornings.

× I do have a buy when I have a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

Errors: 'do have' and present-tense 'have' conflict with 'when I have a child' and 'buy' is wrong word. This is a past situation, so use past tense 'had'. Use correct noun 'bike' instead of 'buy'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× I enjoy bicycle with my dad.

✓ I enjoyed riding a bicycle with my dad.

Errors: 'enjoy' tense should match past context; 'bicycle' needs an article and a verb 'riding' to show the action; missing preposition 'with' is correct but the verb phrase should be 'enjoyed riding a bicycle with my dad.' Suggestion: Use 'enjoyed riding a bicycle' for a past habitual activity.

× When I was young, we ride.

✓ When I was young, we rode our bikes.

Errors: 'ride' is present tense but context is past. Use past simple 'rode'. Also add object 'our bikes' for clarity. Suggestion: Use past tense for actions in the past: 'we rode'.

× We rode around the town about 30 minutes a day and then we have dinner at the side of the road.

✓ We rode around the town for about 30 minutes a day and then we had dinner by the side of the road.

Errors: Mixed tenses: 'rode' is past but 'have' is present. Use past 'had'. Preposition use: 'for about 30 minutes' is standard; 'by the side of the road' is correct preposition. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistently and use 'for' to express duration.

× I do not think by uh popular in my country because Thailand is really hot.

✓ I do not think bikes are very popular in my country because Thailand is really hot.

Errors: 'by' is wrong word; missing subject 'bikes' and adjective placement; 'uh' is filler that should be omitted. Use plural subject 'bikes' and present simple 'are' for general statements. Suggestion: Say 'I do not think bikes are very popular'.

× If you buy in a sunny day, you will have a history and sweat a lot.

✓ If you ride on a sunny day, you will get sunburned and sweat a lot.

Errors: 'buy' is wrong word; 'a sunny day' should be 'on a sunny day'; 'have a history' is meaningless here—likely intended 'get sunburned' or 'heat exhaustion'. Use correct verbs and nouns. Suggestion: Use 'ride' and 'get sunburned' or 'become dehydrated' depending on intended meaning.

× That's what you are doing.

✓ That's what happens.

Errors: The original is vague and awkward in this context. 'That's what you are doing' incorrectly addresses the listener; better to state the general result 'That's what happens.' Suggestion: Use concise phrases to describe consequences.

× Hydration and physical is unhealthy.

✓ Riding in the heat is unhealthy because you can become dehydrated and overheated.

Errors: 'Hydration and physical' are incorrect nouns and poorly structured; 'is' should agree with subject. The intended meaning is that cycling in hot weather can cause dehydration and overheating. Suggestion: Clarify by naming the action and the health risks: 'Riding in the heat is unhealthy; you can become dehydrated and overheated.'