Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, concision and coherence. Start with a clear direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix tense and article errors, avoid repetition and add a linking word to connect ideas. For example, say you did not have a bike, give a specific reason (e.g. safety concerns), and mention briefly what you did instead or what you plan to do.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mother was very worried about safety. Although I loved bikes, she preferred I walk or use public transport instead. Now I plan to get a license and buy a bike when I feel more confident.

제안: Focus on clarity, correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct opinion, then support it with two clear, specific reasons linked logically. Replace mispronounced or incorrect words ('bites'→'bikes', 'restaur'→?), correct grammar and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Keep answers concise (max 3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in India because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people prefer motorcycles and scooters to avoid traffic and save fuel. As a result, bikes are a common sight in both cities and rural areas.

× When I was a child I didn't get a bike.

✓ When I was a child I didn't have a bike.

The verb 'get' is incorrect for possession in this context. Use 'have' to indicate possession in the past. Suggestion: use 'didn't have' when saying you did not possess something in the past.

× My mom is a very scared person, that's why she didn't give me a bike.

✓ My mom is a very cautious person; that's why she didn't give me a bike.

'Scared' describes a temporary feeling, but here a stable characteristic is intended. 'Cautious' or 'overprotective' fits better. Also punctuation: use a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: choose an adjective that describes habitual behavior when explaining reasons.

× I like bike very much then also she didn't give me that one.

✓ I liked bikes very much, but she still didn't give me one.

Several issues: 'like bike' needs plural or an article, tense should match past ('liked'), and 'then also' is unnatural — use 'but she still'. 'that one' is awkward; 'one' is sufficient. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use natural conjunctions like 'but' or 'however'.

× Maybe I take a license for a bike then.

✓ Maybe I will get a license for a bike later.

The original mixes modal/time expressions incorrectly. For a future possibility use 'will' or 'might' plus base verb: 'will get' or 'might get'. 'Take a license' is non-native; 'get a license' or 'apply for a license' is correct. Suggestion: use 'will' or 'might' for future intentions and 'get a license' for obtaining one.

× Bites are so popular in my country, uh, especially in India.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, especially in India.

'Bites' is a misspelling of 'bikes'. 'So popular' is acceptable but 'very popular' is more natural. Ensure correct spelling and word choice. Suggestion: proofread for similar sounding words.

× There are so many cities out there.

✓ There are many cities where people commonly use bikes.

Alone this sentence is grammatical but disconnected. Clarifying the relationship to bikes improves coherence. Suggestion: link sentences to the topic for clarity.

× Uh, the restaur, uh, roads are so rich.

✓ The roads are very busy and well connected.

'Restaur' is a fragment (perhaps 'restaurants') and 'roads are so rich' is incorrect collocation. Use adjectives that describe roads: 'busy', 'well connected', 'crowded'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and collocations to describe infrastructure.

× We can uh, take bikes affordable and I have a less fuel Sandy easy to travel compared with.

✓ We can afford bikes easily, and they use less fuel, so travel is easier compared with cars.

Multiple issues: 'take bikes affordable' is wrong order and word choice — use 'afford bikes easily'. 'I have a less fuel Sandy' is unintelligible; intended: 'they use less fuel'. 'easy to travel compared with' needs an explicit comparison object (cars). Suggestion: reorder phrase to 'afford bikes easily' and state the comparison explicitly as 'compared with cars'.