Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is warm and relevant, but it drifts from directly answering the question and contains some unclear phrasing (‘four Wheeler’). To improve: (1) Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question. (2) Keep supporting details concise (max 3 sentences total). (3) Use clear vocabulary (e.g., “four-wheeled balance bike” or “training wheels”) and linking words to show sequence (e.g., “then,” “after that”). (4) Avoid unnecessary statements about feelings unless brief and directly connected. Focus on clarity and coherence.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bicycle when I was four, and it had training wheels at first. Then my dad taught me how to balance and pedal, and I learned to ride without the training wheels within a few months.

제안: Good direct answer and relevant examples, but reduce repetition and filler words (e.g., “uh,” repeating ‘very popular’). Improve by: (1) Starting with a concise topic sentence. (2) Using linking words (e.g., “for example,” “in addition”) to connect points. (3) Providing one specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen content. (4) Use varied vocabulary (“commonly used,” “widely used,” “for commuting or leisure”).

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Indonesia. For example, many adults use them to commute to work or ride with their families on weekends, and children often cycle to school or meet friends. In addition, bike-sharing programs in some cities have made cycling even more common.

× I love my childhood.

✓ I loved my childhood.

The speaker refers to a past period (childhood), so the past tense 'loved' should be used instead of the present tense 'love'. Use past tense for completed or past experiences. Suggestion: Use 'loved' when talking about feelings about a past time: 'I loved my childhood.'

× I rode it immediately, but it was a four Wheeler.

✓ I rode it immediately, but it was a four-wheeler.

The sentence is in the past tense which is appropriate, but 'four Wheeler' is incorrect capitalization and spacing for a compound noun; use lowercase and hyphenation 'four-wheeler'. Suggestion: Use 'four-wheeler' as a single hyphenated compound noun in lowercase.

× Adults use them to work or on the weekends.

✓ Adults use them to get to work or on weekends.

The phrase 'use them to work' can be ambiguous; native speakers usually say 'use them to get to work'. Also 'on the weekends' is acceptable but in general statements we prefer 'on weekends' (no article) or 'on the weekend(s)' depending on context. Suggestion: Say 'use them to get to work or on weekends.'

× Also kids use bikes to school or just going out with friends, uh, outside the house.

✓ Also, kids use bikes to go to school or just to go out with friends outside the house.

Several issues: 'to school' needs the verb 'go' ('to go to school') and 'just going out' is a noun phrase inconsistent with the surrounding verbs; make the verbs parallel: 'use bikes to go to school or to go out with friends'. Add a comma after 'Also'. Suggestion: Use parallel verb forms ('to go to school' and 'to go out with friends') and include 'go' after 'to' when indicating movement.

× My dad helped me and taught me how to ride a bicycle.

✓ My dad helped me and taught me how to ride a bicycle.

No grammatical error in verb forms here; verbs 'helped' and 'taught' correctly use past tense to match the time frame. This suggestion confirms correct usage and no change is needed.