Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and gives personal background, but it is a bit long-winded and has minor vocabulary and phrasing issues. Aim for a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and smoother linking. Avoid redundant words (e.g., “family members” can be “my family”) and refine phrasing (e.g., use “grew up in a low-income family” or “we shared one bike”). Also keep within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. I shared one bicycle with my family when I was a child because we couldn’t afford separate bikes. For example, my siblings and I took turns riding it to the local park, and we often cycled together on weekends, which was a fun way to explore Hong Kong.

제안: Your response answers the question but is hesitant, unfinished and uses filler words. Make a clear direct statement first, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid fillers like “umm” and vague phrases like “or like.” Use vocabulary such as “widespread” or “common” and provide a concrete example (e.g., increase in car ownership, public transport culture).

예시: Not really. Bicycles are less common in many Chinese cities because car ownership has risen rapidly and public transport is often the preferred option. For instance, many families now own a car for convenience, and bike lanes in some urban areas have been reduced, so fewer people cycle daily.

× Well, when I was a child, I shared a bike with my family members because I came from a grassroot family and we used to ride a bike together and to travel around the places in Hong Kong.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I shared a bike with my family because I came from a grassroots family, and we used to ride the bike together to travel around places in Hong Kong.

The original sentence has quantifier and article issues: 'family members' is redundant when 'family' suffices; 'grassroot' is a word-formation error and should be 'grassroots'; 'a bike' then 'the bike' is clearer when referring to the shared single bike; 'around the places' is unnatural — 'around places' or 'around the city' is better. Suggestion: use concise quantifiers and correct noun forms, ensure consistent article use when referring to a specific shared object.

× To be honest, I do not think that bicycles are prevalent in my country because umm, many people in China or at least a large population of the Chinese residents can afford vehicles or like.

✓ To be honest, I do not think that bicycles are prevalent in my country because many people in China, or at least a large proportion of Chinese residents, can afford vehicles.

The original sentence uses imprecise quantifiers and filler words: 'a large population of the Chinese residents' is awkward; 'a large proportion of Chinese residents' is more natural. The trailing 'or like' is filler and ungrammatical. Remove fillers and choose precise quantifiers. Also 'bicycles are prevalent' is fine; keep tense consistent. Suggestion: avoid filler phrases and use standard quantifiers such as 'a large proportion' or 'many'.