Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: give a direct topic sentence, correct past tense and possessive forms, and add one specific detail. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences). For example, say who bought the bike, what kind it was, and one memory or skill learned. Use linking words if you add more detail.

예시: Yes. My father bought me a small red bicycle when I was seven, and he taught me how to ride it in the park. Because he practiced with me every weekend, I became confident riding on busy streets by the time I was ten.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use correct tense and articles. State your opinion directly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g. 'because', 'however'). Avoid unfinished sentences. Be concise (2–4 sentences).

예시: I think bicycles used to be very popular, but they are less common now. Many people prefer cars or motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting; therefore, fewer people ride bikes in cities today.

× Yeah, my father bought me a bike and my bike skill is tough my by my father.

✓ Yeah, my father bought me a bike and my biking skills were taught to me by my father.

The sentence mixes incorrect word forms and tense. 'bought' is correct past tense for buying, but 'my bike skill is tough my by my father' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that the father taught the student to ride, which should use the past passive 'were taught to me' or active 'he taught me'. Also use 'biking skills' (plural) instead of 'bike skill' and 'taught' instead of 'tough'. Suggestion: say 'my father taught me how to ride' or 'my biking skills were taught to me by my father.'

× Yeah, if in the past the answer will be yes, but at now everyone have own cars or motorbikes and because the motor motorbikes and car is more efficient and convenient for people.

✓ Yes, in the past the answer would have been yes, but now everyone has their own cars or motorbikes because motorbikes and cars are more efficient and convenient for people.

Several tense and agreement issues: 'if in the past the answer will be yes' should be conditional/past: 'in the past the answer would have been yes.' 'at now' is incorrect; use 'now.' Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone have' should be 'everyone has' (singular agreement). Redundant 'motor motorbikes' removed. Use plural agreement for 'motorbikes and cars are' instead of 'is.' Also use 'their own' for natural possession. Suggestion: simplify to 'In the past the answer would have been yes, but now everyone has their own cars or motorbikes because they are more efficient and convenient.'

× So I think in my country the bike.

✓ So I think bikes are less common in my country now.

The original is an incomplete sentence lacking a verb and clear structure. 'So I think in my country the bike.' does not express a complete idea. Provide a full clause with subject and verb, such as 'bikes are less common' or 'bicycles are not as popular.' Suggestion: state a clear opinion like 'I think bicycles are less common in my country now.'