Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, split into 2–3 concise sentences, correct grammar (tense, articles, plural), and add a specific detail to make it more vivid. Use linking words like 'and' or 'however' correctly. For example, mention the child’s age or a specific memory and correct verbs: 'encouraged' and 'fell down several times.'

예시: Yes. My grandfather bought me a bicycle when I was eight, and he taught me to ride in the park. Although I fell down several times, he always encouraged me to keep trying, so I wasn’t afraid of falling.

제안: Make the response clearer and grammatical: give two distinct reasons (practical transport and leisure/exercise), use linking words ('firstly', 'also', 'however'), and correct vocabulary (e.g. 'many', 'cyclists', 'there are', 'lack of'). Add a specific example or statistic if possible. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. Firstly, many low‑income or foreign workers use bicycles as their main way to get to work because they are cheap and convenient. Also, wealthier people cycle for exercise and leisure; however, there are not enough dedicated cycle lanes in many cities.

× Yes, my grandfather bought me a bicycle and he used to teach me how to ride a bicycle in the park and although I fell down for a number of times but he he always encourages me to continue and don't be afraid of falling.

✓ Yes, my grandfather bought me a bicycle, and he used to teach me how to ride it in the park. Although I fell down a number of times, he always encouraged me to continue and not be afraid of falling.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'bought' correctly uses past simple for a completed action. 'Used to teach' is correct for a past habitual action, but 'encourages' is present tense and should match the past context as 'encouraged' (Past tense issue). 'I fell down for a number of times' is awkward; use 'a number of times' without 'for'. 'Don't be afraid' is present imperative; in a past narrative it is better to use the infinitive 'not be afraid' after 'encouraged' or report speech. Also replace the repeated word 'he he' and avoid repeating 'bicycle' by using the pronoun 'it'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense in the narrative, remove redundant words, and use correct collocations ('a number of times', 'encouraged me to continue and not be afraid of falling').

× Yes, for a lot of foreign workers they use bicycle as their primary transport to work or going anywhere.

✓ Yes, many foreign workers use bicycles as their primary means of transport to work or to go anywhere.

Preposition and noun usage issues: 'for a lot of foreign workers they use' is redundant; better 'many foreign workers use'. 'Use bicycle' needs plural 'bicycles' (Singular and plural issue, but corrected under preposition/usage) and 'primary transport' is better phrased 'primary means of transport'. 'To work or going anywhere' mixes infinitive and -ing; use parallel infinitives 'to work or to go anywhere'. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, choose correct collocations ('means of transport'), and keep parallel structure with prepositions and verb forms.

× And also for the more wealthy people cycling is a popular choice of sports that keep them healthy, but unfortunately they earn a lot of cycling tracks available.

✓ Also, among wealthier people, cycling is a popular sport that keeps them healthy, but unfortunately there are not many cycling tracks available.

Several adjective/adverb and word choice errors: 'the more wealthy people' is awkward; use 'wealthier people' or 'among wealthier people'. 'A popular choice of sports' is incorrect: 'a popular sport' or 'a popular choice of exercise' is better. 'That keep them healthy' must agree with singular 'sport', so 'keeps' (Subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'they earn a lot of cycling tracks available' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is likely 'there are not a lot of cycling tracks available' or 'there are few cycling tracks available' (There be issue and incorrect word choice). Suggestions: fix adjective order, use correct noun phrases ('popular sport'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'there are' to state availability, possibly with 'few' or 'not many' to express scarcity.