Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ตอบดีแล้ว แต่ควรปรับให้กระชับเป็นประโยคหัวเรื่อง แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนมากขึ้น ใช้คำเชื่อมเล็กน้อย และหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ชัดเจน (เช่น “Rd.”) รวมถึงจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค ตัวอย่างข้อเสนอแนะ: เริ่มด้วยประโยคตรงไปตรงมา ระบุว่าใครให้จักรยาน กล่าวถึงสถานที่หรือกิจกรรมที่ชัดเจน และสรุปความรู้สึกสั้น ๆ

예시: Yes. My father bought me a bicycle when I was about eight, and he taught me how to ride it in our neighborhood park. I often rode with a group of friends every afternoon, racing along the bike paths and exploring nearby streets. Riding a bike became my favorite way to spend free time because it felt freeing and fun.

제안: คำตอบชัดเจนแต่ยังทั่วไปเกินไป ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ตรงคำถาม จากนั้นให้เหตุผลที่เฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น พร้อมเชื่อมเหตุผลด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น “because” หรือ “however” และอาจยกตัวอย่างหรือเปรียบเทียบเพื่อเสริมความน่าเชื่อถือ จำกัดไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค

예시: They used to be more popular, but I think fewer people ride bikes now because more families own cars and motorbikes. For example, commuters prefer motorbikes for speed, and suburban areas often lack safe bike lanes. However, cycling remains common for leisure in parks and among students.

× I did. My father bought me a bicycle when I was younger and at that time he also taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ I did. My father bought me a bicycle when I was younger, and at that time he also taught me how to ride it.

The sentence is mostly correct in past tense, but repetition of 'bike/bicycle' is stylistically weak rather than grammatical. Replace the second noun with a pronoun 'it' to avoid redundancy and improve cohesion. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: Use pronouns to avoid repetition and punctuate compound sentences with a comma before 'and'.

× So I took the bike to Rd. with all of my friends when we were younger.

✓ So I used to go to the road with all my friends when we were younger.

The original uses 'took the bike to Rd.' which is awkward and partially incorrect: 'took' is past tense but collocation is odd; 'Rd.' abbreviation is unsuitable in spoken answer. Use 'used to go' to express habitual past action, and 'the road' or 'to the road' rather than 'to Rd.' Also omit 'of' in 'all my friends' (no 'of'). Suggestion: Use 'used to' for repeated past actions and full words not abbreviations; say 'all my friends' instead of 'all of my friends' though both are acceptable.

× I love riding a bicycle.

✓ I love riding a bicycle.

This sentence is correct: present simple is appropriate to express a general preference or habit. No change necessary. Suggestion: Keep present simple for likes and preferences.

× It was before, but nowadays I think people do not ride a bicycle anymore.

✓ They were before, but nowadays I think people do not ride bicycles anymore.

The original 'It was before' is unclear and mismatches number; 'they' or 'bicycles' as plural fits the subject 'people'. Also 'ride a bicycle' can be pluralized to 'ride bicycles' for generalization. Use 'they were' or better 'bicycles were popular before' to be clearer. Suggestion: Match pronouns and nouns in number and state clearly what 'it' refers to (for example 'bikes were popular before').

× That is because there are more kind of transportation, such as travelling with a car or a motorbike, so that people don't use bikes anymore.

✓ That is because there are more kinds of transportation, such as traveling by car or by motorbike, so people don't use bikes anymore.

Errors: 'more kind of transportation' should be 'more kinds of transportation' (plural noun + plural 'kinds'). 'Travelling with a car' is unnatural; use 'traveling by car' or 'by motorbike'. The conjunction 'so that' is unnecessary; use 'so' for result. Also use 'don't' contraction only in informal speech; sentence is fine with 'don't'. Suggestion: Use 'kinds of' for categories, 'travel by' for modes of transport, and 'so' for simple result clauses.