Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small mistakes, and add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid confusing phrases (e.g., "borrowed my friend's bags").

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. My family couldn't afford one then, so I often borrowed a friend's bike and rode around the neighborhood on weekends. Because of that, I learned to be careful in traffic and became quite confident riding by the time I was a teenager.

제안: Make the answer more natural and specific: give a clear topic sentence, use linking words (e.g., "for example," "because"), correct awkward phrasing (e.g., "for their wellness", "get to know the outskirts"), and add one concrete example or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, during the pandemic many people started cycling because it is good exercise and a safe way to get outdoors. As a result, local parks and cycling paths saw a big increase in users, and some cities even added new bike lanes to accommodate them.

× My family couldn't afford one at a time, so I usually borrowed my friend's bags to ride around their neighborhoods on weekends.

✓ My family couldn't afford one at the time, so I usually borrowed my friends' bikes to ride around the neighborhood on weekends.

Plural and possessive errors: 'at a time' should be 'at the time' (idiomatic). 'friend's bags' is incorrect: context requires plural friends and bikes, so use 'friends' (plural possessive) and 'bikes' (plural). 'their neighborhoods' is inconsistent with singular family and general location; 'the neighborhood' is more natural when referring to where you grew up. Suggestion: use plural possessive with plural noun when borrowing from multiple friends and use 'the' for a specific area.'

× Yes, I believe that bikes are popular in my country. Actually, during the pandemic, everybody went on biking because it's really a kind of workout as well and for their Wellness, aside from getting to be familiar with the outskirts.

✓ Yes, I believe that bikes are popular in my country. Actually, during the pandemic, everybody took up biking because it's a good workout and good for their wellbeing, besides getting to know the outskirts.

Article and word choice issues: 'went on biking' is awkward; 'took up biking' is idiomatic. 'it's really a kind of workout as well' is wordy; 'it's a good workout' is concise. 'their Wellness' capitalisation and noun form are wrong; use 'their wellbeing' (lowercase, single word). 'getting to be familiar with the outskirts' is unidiomatic; use 'getting to know the outskirts'. Also 'aside from' can be replaced with 'besides' for smoother flow.'