Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, verb tenses and sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and fix verb forms (e.g., use past tense for past events).

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend. However, when I was about ten, my father threw it away for reasons I didn't understand, so I stopped riding after that.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and avoid repetition. Start with a direct opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'due to', 'therefore'). Use correct word choice ('bikes' not 'bags') and concise phrasing.

예시: Not really. Bikes are not very popular in Hong Kong because public transport is extensive and more convenient. For example, there are frequent buses and the MTR, so most people prefer those options over cycling.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence describes a past situation, so the present tense 'have' is incorrect. Use past simple 'had' to match the time frame (when I was a child). Suggestion: use past simple for past time expressions.

× I remember when I was have a bike since I was seven years old.

✓ I remember having a bike since I was seven years old.

The clause contains incorrect verb forms: 'was have' is ungrammatical. After 'remember' when referring to a past continuous or state, use the gerund 'having' or use past simple 'I had a bike from when I was seven.' Also 'since' can be used with present perfect (I have had) but because 'remember' is in present, 'remember having' is natural. Suggestion: use 'remember having' or recast as 'I had a bike from when I was seven.'

× But however because I don't know why but my father just thrown it away and my bike had disappeared.

✓ However, I don't know why, but my father just threw it away and my bike disappeared.

Multiple issues: 'thrown' is the past participle and needs an auxiliary (has/had) but context requires simple past 'threw.' 'Had disappeared' is past perfect but unnecessary here; simple past 'disappeared' matches 'just threw.' Also redundant conjunctions ('but however because') should be reduced. Suggestion: simplify connectors and use simple past for completed past events.

× Umm, I think the bags are not quite popular in our country because I'm living in Hong Kong and Hong Kong, because Hong Kong, they're in Hong Kong, there are many transportations to get on, so I think it is more convenient than bike.

✓ Umm, I think bikes are not very popular in our country because I live in Hong Kong, and there are many forms of transportation available, so I think they are more convenient than bikes.

Errors include incorrect noun 'bags' instead of 'bikes,' awkward repetition of 'Hong Kong,' incorrect pronoun 'they're in Hong Kong' and uncountable/plural issues with 'transportations' (use 'forms of transportation' or 'modes of transport'). Comparative phrase 'more convenient than bike' needs plural or article: 'more convenient than bikes.' Also use present simple 'I live' for general fact. Suggestion: correct nouns, reduce repetition, use plural forms and appropriate collocations like 'modes of transport.'