Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural, concise, and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and incorrect verbs (e.g., 'writing').

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My grandparents gave me a bright pink bicycle with a small basket, so I loved riding it around the neighborhood. Because it was so eye-catching, I often felt proud to show it to my friends.

제안: Improve clarity and accuracy. Begin with a direct statement, then provide two specific reasons linked by connectors. Use correct verbs (e.g., 'use' not 'ills') and avoid hesitation words. Be specific about who uses bikes and for what purposes.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Vietnam. For example, many students and workers use bicycles to commute because they are cheap and convenient, and others ride bikes for exercise and short errands since cycling is healthy and practical.

× Umm, of course, when I was a little girl I owned a bike which was presented by my grandparents.

✓ Umm, of course, when I was a little girl I had a bike that was given to me by my grandparents.

The original used 'owned' and 'presented by' which sound unnatural in this context. 'Had' is a more natural past-tense verb for possession in spoken English. 'Presented by' is grammatically correct but formal; 'given to me by' is more natural. Use past simple consistently for past events. Suggestions: use 'had' for possession and 'given to me by' for natural phrasing.

× I love it because it was bright pink and had a little basket, so I felt proud, uh, writing it.

✓ I loved it because it was bright pink and had a little basket, so I felt proud of it.

Tense mismatch: the student mixes present 'I love it' with past context 'when I was a little girl.' Change 'I love it' to past 'I loved it' to keep past narrative. 'Writing it' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'riding it' or 'owning it.' Based on context, 'riding it' or simply 'proud of it' is appropriate. Here 'proud of it' fixes the grammatical error. Suggestions: maintain consistent past tense for past stories and use correct verb 'ride' if referring to using the bike.

× MMM, I, I think so because, you know, students in Vietnam are mainly ills bikes to, uh, commute and uh, many people choose bikes to, uh, to do exercise as, umm, convenient vehicle.

✓ I think so because, you know, students in Vietnam mainly use bikes to commute, and many people choose bikes to exercise because they are a convenient vehicle.

Multiple errors: 'are mainly ills bikes to' is ungrammatical and appears to be incorrect word order and wrong verb. The correct verb is 'use' and it should follow the subject: 'students mainly use bikes to commute.' 'Choose bikes to do exercise as convenient vehicle' is awkward: better 'choose bikes to exercise' or 'choose bikes for exercise because they are a convenient vehicle.' Also maintain present simple to describe general facts. Punctuation and filler words removed for clarity. Suggestions: use 'use' for employing a mode of transport, keep present simple for general truths, and reorder phrases into natural English word order.