Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and correct grammar, avoid unclear words (e.g. ‘ride a bag’) and verb tense inconsistency. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and use varied vocabulary (gave → gifted; practice → practiced).

예시: Yes — I had a bicycle as a child. My parents gifted it to me for my birthday, and I loved its bright colors. Although I couldn’t ride it at first, I practiced every day in the park, so I learned quickly.

제안: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar (people of all ages; people in my country love). Remove hesitation words and redundant phrases. Use linking words (for example, moreover) and give one specific example or reason to support your view.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. People of all ages ride them for exercise or leisure, and many families even take part in community cycling events; for example, weekend bike marathons are common.

× I practice every day in the park and learn quickly.

✓ I practiced every day in the park and learned quickly.

The context is past ("when I was a child"), so verbs should be in the past tense. "Practice" and "learn" are present tense; change to "practiced" and "learned" to match the narrative time frame. Suggestion: keep all verbs consistent in past when describing past events.

× I loved it so much and it was so colorful even though I couldn't ride a bag at first.

✓ I loved it so much because it was very colorful, but I couldn't ride a bike at first.

The original uses "even though" and the incorrect word "bag" instead of "bike," producing a sentence that is confusing. Replace "bag" with "bike." Use "but" to contrast loving the bike with being unable to ride it, or use "because" to link love to its color. Also change "so colorful" to "very colorful" for natural phrasing. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× Uh, people in all ages ride a bike in park or even go on a marathon with their family and friends and people in Thailand, People in my country loves riding bikes.

✓ People of all ages ride bikes in parks or even take part in marathons with their family and friends, and people in Thailand love riding bikes.

Multiple issues: "people in all ages" is incorrect—use "people of all ages." "Ride a bike" should be pluralized to "ride bikes" or use "ride a bike" with people individually; plural is more natural. "In park" needs the plural or article: "in parks." "Go on a marathon" is unnatural; use "take part in marathons" or "participate in marathons." "People in my country loves" has subject-verb agreement error; "people" requires "love." The correction fixes pluralization, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement to make the sentence grammatical and natural.

× people in Thailand, People in my country loves riding bikes.

✓ People in Thailand, and people in my country, love riding bikes.

The verb "loves" does not agree with the plural subject "people." Use "love." Also ensure consistent capitalization and join clauses properly with a conjunction. Suggestion: match verb number to subject number and maintain consistent punctuation and capitalization.