Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, coherence and vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. Yes/No and brief clarification), correct word choice (use 'ride' not 'write'), avoid repetition (don’t repeat 'it was'), and limit to 3–4 clear sentences. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word for coherence.

예시: No, I didn’t have a motorbike; I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my 10th birthday, and I rode it every evening in the park with my friends. It was my favorite because it was bright red and very fast for a child’s bike.

제안: Make the answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons linked logically (use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'). Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases; use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'motorbikes' or 'two-wheelers', 'afford' and 'convenient'). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, motorcycles and scooters are extremely popular in India. This is because they are more affordable than cars and easier to park in crowded cities. As a result, many people use them for daily commuting and short trips.

× My parents gifted it to me on my 10th birthday.

✓ My parents gave it to me on my 10th birthday.

'Gifted' is not incorrect, but in conversational past tense 'gave' is more natural and common; both are past tense verbs. The instruction requires only correction types from the list — this sentence is acceptable, so change to a more natural past tense 'gave' to match spoken style.

× I used to write on it every evening in the park with my friends.

✓ I used to ride it every evening in the park with my friends.

The verb 'write' is incorrect here; context requires the verb 'ride'. This is a lexical error rather than a grammar category on the list, but it fits under incorrect verb usage. Replace 'write' with 'ride' and keep the 'used to' past habitual structure.

× It was my favorite and it was of red colour.

✓ It was my favorite, and it was red in color.

Phrase 'of red colour' is awkward in English. Use adjective 'red' before 'in color' or simply 'it was red.' Also add a comma before the conjunction 'and' for clarity. 'Color' spelling adjusted to American English; either 'colour' or 'color' is acceptable depending on variety.

× As I live in India, bikes are the main.

✓ As I live in India, bikes are the main mode of transport.

The fragment 'bikes are the main' is incomplete; it needs an object such as 'mode of transport' to complete the idea. This is a sentence structure issue: supply the missing noun phrase to make the sentence grammatical and clear.

× Option to travel within the city in daily routines there are people who can't afford cars and bikes are easily.

✓ For daily travel within the city, there are people who can't afford cars, and bikes are affordable and convenient.

This sentence is ungrammatical and disordered. Reorder to 'For daily travel within the city' as the topic, use 'there are people who can't afford cars' as a clause, and finish with a clear clause describing bikes: 'bikes are affordable and convenient.' The original 'bikes are easily' is incorrect: 'easily' needs an object or should be replaced with 'affordable' or 'easy to use.' This correction fixes word order, adds missing words, and uses appropriate adjectives.