Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, relevant and well-structured with a topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve, make the language more varied and natural by replacing repetitive phrasing, adding one brief specific memory or feeling, and using a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 short sentences).

예시: Yes, I did — I had a small bike with training wheels when I was about six. My dad bought it so I could learn to ride safely, and I remember practicing every afternoon in our quiet street. Because of that, I felt confident riding on my own by the time I was eight.

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives reasons, but it is slightly awkward in phrasing and contains a run-on sentence. Improve coherence by using a clear topic sentence, adding a linking word, and giving one specific example or brief comparison. Avoid filler words like “honestly” and correct the comparative clause structure.

예시: Not really — bikes aren’t very popular in my country because there is little cycling infrastructure. For example, we rarely have dedicated bike lanes, whereas cities like Amsterdam have extensive networks that make cycling safe and convenient. As a result, most people prefer cars or public transport.

× Unfortunately bikes are not popular in my country because we lack proper infrastructure for cycling and like cities such as Amsterdam or Moscow, they have dedicated lanes for bikes which honestly helps a lot.

✓ Unfortunately, bikes are not popular in my country because we lack proper infrastructure for cycling; unlike cities such as Amsterdam or Moscow, they have dedicated lanes for bikes, which honestly help a lot.

Error type: 'There be' and related sentence structure and subject-verb agreement issues. The original sentence misuses 'like' where 'unlike' is required to contrast, and the clause 'which honestly helps a lot' uses singular verb 'helps' but refers to the plural noun 'lanes'. Also the sentence runs on and is confusing. Suggested corrections: use 'Unfortunately,' with a comma, replace 'and like cities such as' with '; unlike cities such as' to create a clear contrast, and change 'helps' to 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'lanes'. Use a semicolon or comma to break the long sentence for clarity.