Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use (e.g., 'I got a bike when I was four' not 'I'm just four'). Avoid filler sounds like 'uh' and repeating phrases. For example, say when you got it, whether you learned to ride, and a brief detail about how you used it.

예시: I did. I got a bike when I was four years old, but at that time I didn’t know how to ride it, so it was mainly a toy. Later, when I was six, my older brother taught me to ride on our quiet street, and I remember being very proud when I could go without training wheels.

제안: Make the answer direct and organized. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting points using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'however'). Use correct noun forms and pluralization (e.g., 'bikes' not 'bike'), and improve sentence structure to avoid repetition. Mention specific factors such as traffic, lack of bike lanes, or public transport to support your view.

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong because the city is very crowded and there are few safe bike lanes. For example, heavy traffic and narrow streets make cycling difficult, and many people prefer using efficient public transport like the MTR instead.

× I have uh, I got a bike when I'm just four years old, but at that time I don't know how to ride a bike, so just buy to play it.

✓ I got a bike when I was just four years old, but at that time I did not know how to ride it, so I just had it to play with.

Multiple tense and auxiliary errors: 'I have uh, I got' mixes present and past; use simple past 'I got'. 'when I'm just four years old' should be past 'when I was just four years old'. 'I don't know' should be past 'I did not know'. 'so just buy to play it' is incorrect verb choice and tense — use 'I just had it to play with' or 'I just used it to play'. Improve by keeping past tense consistent and using correct verbs and objects. Suggestion: Tell the story entirely in past tense and use appropriate verbs (got, was, did not know, had, play with).

× Not not really know how to ride.

✓ I did not really know how to ride.

This fragment lacks proper tense and auxiliary: 'Not not really know' is ungrammatical. The speaker refers to past inability, so use past auxiliary 'did not' plus base verb 'know'. Also remove duplicated 'not'. To improve, form a complete clause: 'I did not really know how to ride.'

× I don't think by our popular in my country, 'cause I'm living in Hong Kong and Hong Kong are so crowded a lot of people and just do not have a lot of a bike, road or bike or ride for riding a bike.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country, because I live in Hong Kong and Hong Kong is so crowded that many people do not have space or bike lanes for riding.

Pronoun and noun errors: 'by our popular' is meaningless; correct noun is 'bikes' as subject. 'I'm living' can be simplified to 'I live' for general statement. Subject-verb agreement: 'Hong Kong are' should be 'Hong Kong is'. Word choice and word order: 'a lot of a bike, road or bike or ride for riding a bike' is confusing; replace with 'space or bike lanes for riding'. Improve by using correct nouns/pronouns, singular verb with 'Hong Kong', and clear phrases (space, bike lanes).