Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับปรุงความถูกต้องของคำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ รวมถึงความชัดเจนของประโยคหลักและรายละเอียดรอง ใช้คำที่ถูกต้อง (เช่น "bike" แทน "bite") และแก้รูปประโยคเพื่อให้สมบูรณ์ เช่น ระบุว่าคุณไปไหนได้โดยไม่ต้องพึ่งพิงใคร นอกจากนี้ควรเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมอย่าง "so" หรือ "which" และจำกัดยาวไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยคตามธรรมชาติ

예시: Yes. I had a small bike that my parents bought for me, and I used to ride it to school every day. Riding it made me feel more independent, so I could go wherever I wanted without asking for a lift.

제안: ปรับปรุงความชัดเจนของความคิดและการใช้คำเชื่อม จัดประโยคให้เป็นโครงสร้างชัดเจน (topic sentence + supporting details) แก้คำศัพท์ที่ผิดและรูปประโยค เช่น "Yes, bikes are popular" แล้วให้รายละเอียดสั้นๆ ว่าใครใช้จักรยานและเพื่อวัตถุประสงค์อะไร ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "for example" หรือ "for" เพื่อเชื่อมข้อมูล

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children ride bicycles to school, and adults often cycle for exercise in parks or short trips around town.

× Yes I did. I had a small bite that's my parents bought for me and I used to ride it to school every day.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a small bike that my parents bought for me and I used to ride it to school every day.

The student used 'bite' instead of 'bike' which is a word choice error, but also wrote 'that's' incorrectly; it should be the relative pronoun 'that' linking to the noun. The verb forms 'had', 'bought', and 'used to ride' correctly indicate past habits, so keep past tense. Suggestion: replace 'bite' with 'bike' and use 'that' (not 'that's') to form the relative clause: 'a small bike that my parents bought for me'. (This explanation is in English as requested.)

× It makes me feel more independent because I could go wherever I want without.

✓ It made me feel more independent because I could go wherever I wanted without help.

Tense inconsistency and incomplete clause: the question is about childhood, so use past tense 'made' and 'wanted' to match 'could'. Also the sentence ends with 'without' which is incomplete; add an object like 'help' or 'my parents' to complete the thought. Suggestion: use past tense for feelings about past events and complete the prepositional phrase, for example 'without help'. (This explanation is in English as requested.)

× Gas bikes popular in my country people rise by bicycle for children, go to school and exercise in the park bicycle.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country. People ride bicycles for children to go to school and to exercise in the park.

Multiple errors: missing verb 'are' (There be/verb issue), incorrect word 'Gas' and 'rise' instead of 'ride', and confused sentence structure. The ideas should be split into clear sentences: 'Bikes are popular in my country.' Use present simple 'are' for general facts. Use 'people ride bicycles', not 'rise'. Clarify purposes with infinitives or gerunds: 'to go to school' or 'to exercise in the park'. Suggestion: write simple, separate sentences with correct verbs and connectors, e.g. 'Bikes are popular in my country. People ride bicycles to go to school and to exercise in the park.' (This explanation is in English as requested.)