Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, fix tense and phrasing, and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundant words and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words like “and” or “also.”

예시: Yes, I had two bikes when I was a child. One was a small pink children’s bike my parents bought me, and the other was a blue bike that I loved riding around the park on weekends.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar, give a clear topic sentence, use linking words to explain reasons and consequences, and provide a specific example or comparison. Avoid incomplete sentences. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Not really; cycling is not very popular in my country. Most people prefer private cars or motorcycles, and many also use public transport, mainly because the weather is hot for much of the year. As a result, few people choose to cycle regularly.

× Yes, I had to bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I biked when I was a child.

The original uses 'had to bike', which implies obligation rather than simple past habit. This is a sentence structure/verb usage error. Use the simple past verb 'biked' to state an action or habit in childhood: 'I biked when I was a child.' Suggestion: use 'biked' for habitual past actions; reserve 'had to' for obligations.

× One was a small pig children bike that my parents bought me and the other was a blue bike that I enjoy riding around the park.

✓ One was a small pink children's bike that my parents bought for me, and the other was a blue bike that I enjoyed riding around the park.

Multiple errors: 'pig' is a typo for 'pink' (word choice), 'children bike' should be the possessive noun 'children's bike', 'bought me' is informal and better expressed as 'bought for me', and tense should be past 'enjoyed' to match 'was' and the past timeframe. This fits adjective/noun use and article/possessive issues (mapped to IDs 13 and 22 but per instructions only list one: 13). Suggestion: correct spelling to 'pink', use 'children's' for the compound noun, include 'for' with 'bought', and use past tense 'enjoyed' to maintain consistent past narration.

× Not really. Most people here tend to favor private cars or motorcycles and often use public transport in straight, mainly because the weather is very hot for much of this year.

✓ Not really. Most people here tend to favor private cars or motorcycles and often use public transport instead, mainly because the weather has been very hot for much of this year.

The phrase 'in straight' is incorrect; the intended word is 'instead' (opposition), so this is a sentence structure/word choice error. Also, 'the weather is very hot for much of this year' is awkward when referring to a period up to now; use present perfect 'has been' to indicate an ongoing condition 'for much of this year'. Suggestion: replace 'in straight' with 'instead' and change 'is' to 'has been' to reflect the time span.

× As a result, cycling is.

✓ As a result, cycling is not very common.

The sentence 'cycling is.' is incomplete and lacks a complement; this is a sentence structure error (fragment). It needs an adjective or phrase to complete the idea. Suggestion: add a complement such as 'not very common' or 'less popular' to convey the intended meaning.