Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence, and add one or two concise supporting details. Keep it natural and under five sentences. Use linking words like “so” or “and” to make it coherent. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “I really enjoyed it” not “I was really enjoying that”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school every day, so it was both a convenient way to travel and a fun exercise. I especially enjoyed racing with friends around the neighborhood after classes.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then provide specific supporting details and correct awkward phrasing. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to connect ideas, and avoid vague adverbs like “soon.” Be concise and specific about when and where people ride bikes.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many cities have dedicated cycle paths. For example, people often ride on weekends for leisure, and commuters use bicycles to travel through the city center during rush hour.

× I, I, I did when I was a kid, I used to ride a bike to go to school and cycling is 1. It's one of my outdoor activities which I was really enjoying that.

✓ I did when I was a kid. I used to ride a bike to go to school, and cycling was one of my outdoor activities that I really enjoyed.

Multiple issues: inconsistent tense and awkward phrasing. 'I did when I was a kid' is acceptable but run-on. 'I used to ride' correctly indicates past habitual action. 'Cycling is 1' is incorrect and likely a filler; replace with 'cycling was one of my outdoor activities' to match past time frame. 'Which I was really enjoying that' mixes continuous past with unnecessary pronouns; use simple past 'that I really enjoyed.' Suggestions: keep past tense consistent for childhood descriptions, avoid fillers and redundant relative pronouns, and use simple past for completed habitual activities. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I think so, there are plenty of cycle paths in my country and people prefer to ride at the weekend soon and cycle through the city.

✓ I think so. There are plenty of cycle paths in my country, and people prefer to ride at the weekend and cycle through the city.

Problems: awkward adverb 'soon' is misplaced and unnecessary; it confuses meaning. The sentence is also a run-on with comma misuse. Split into two sentences or use a comma before the conjunction. 'Prefer to ride at the weekend and cycle through the city' is fine once 'soon' is removed. Suggestions: remove 'soon' unless you mean 'soon' specifically, use sentence break or correct comma + conjunction, and place adverbs next to the verb they modify.