Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency, make the response more natural and concise, and add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Use a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., drop extra words like “time”).

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was a present from my parents for my seventh birthday, and I usually rode it in the evenings around my neighborhood. For example, I would practice balancing on quiet streets until I felt confident.

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words, organize ideas with linking words, correct vocabulary (use ‘popular’ or ‘common’ rather than ‘famous’), and give one clear specific example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid unclear phrases like “three bikes with the three tyres.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very common in my country. For instance, many students and young people ride scooters and tricycles for short journeys, and adults often use bicycles for commuting to work because they are cheap and convenient.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'child'. Use 'a child' because it refers to being a child in general. Suggestion: include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns.

× It was gifted by my parents on my 7th birthday.

✓ It was a gift from my parents on my 7th birthday.

'Gifted by' is awkward here; native speakers say 'a gift from' when describing something received. Also using passive 'was gifted by' is grammatically possible but less natural. Suggestion: use 'It was a gift from my parents' for clarity and naturalness.

× I used to ride a bike in the evening time.

✓ I used to ride my bike in the evenings.

'Used to' requires the base verb 'ride' (which is correct) but 'in the evening time' is awkward. Use the plural 'evenings' to indicate habitual action. Also specify 'my bike' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'in the evenings' for habitual past actions.

× Yes, bikes are very famous in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

'Famous' describes people or places known widely; 'popular' describes something liked or commonly used. For things in common use, 'popular' is correct. Suggestion: choose adjectives that match the intended meaning.

× Most of people uh, use bikes every day, like for youngsters, uh, there are uh, three bikes with the three tyres.

✓ Most people use bikes every day. For example, youngsters often use tricycles when they are very young.

Multiple issues: 'Most of people' should be 'Most people' (article error/structure). The original mixes ideas and has unclear phrase 'three bikes with the three tyres'—likely meaning tricycles. Split into two sentences and clarify. Suggestion: use 'Most people' and replace unclear descriptions with correct terms like 'tricycles'.

× And I think adults also use uh, bikes for their, uh, for their professional works, for example.

✓ And I think adults also use bikes for their work, for example.

'Professional works' is incorrect collocation; use 'work' or 'jobs'. Also unnecessary repeated 'for their'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: say 'use bikes for work' or 'for their jobs'.