Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your tense and grammar consistent, supply a clear topic sentence, and add one brief supporting detail. Use past tense for past experiences, keep sentences natural and concise, and avoid repetition. For example, say you had a bike, mention who gave it to you or how you used it, and use a linking word if you add details.

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I rode it almost every day around the neighborhood.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence, organize supporting points with linking words, correct common grammar mistakes, and use more precise vocabulary. Keep answers within 3–4 short sentences: state your opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons or examples (e.g., cost, convenience, traffic). Avoid repetition and awkward word order.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to maintain. For example, many people use them to commute short distances since traffic can be heavy and public transport is not always convenient.

× Yes, I have bike when I am in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student is speaking about the past, so present tense 'have' and 'am' are incorrect; use past tense 'had' and 'was'. Also 'bike' needs an article 'a' and 'in my childhood' is unnatural; 'when I was a child' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past time and include articles where required.

× Yes, of course in my country bikes are very necessary thing.

✓ Yes, of course, in my country bikes are a very necessary thing.

The noun phrase requires an article 'a' before 'very necessary thing'. Also insert commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a' with singular countable noun phrases and include commas around introductory phrases.

× In my country there is a very usable and also it is very cheapest ride we can buy afford any anyone can afford the bike in our country.

✓ In my country, bicycles are very useful and are among the cheapest rides; almost anyone can afford a bike.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and repetitive. 'There is a very usable' is incorrect structure; 'usable' is an adjective needing a noun. The superlative 'cheapest' needs comparison context and the phrase 'we can buy afford any anyone can afford the bike' is redundant and incorrect. Correction uses plural 'bicycles', proper adjective 'useful', clarifies 'among the cheapest', and simplifies affordability statement. Suggestion: simplify complex ideas into clear clauses and ensure adjectives modify nouns correctly.

× So it's a very good transportation vehicle.

✓ So it is a very good means of transportation.

'Transportation vehicle' is awkward and redundant; 'means of transportation' is the natural collocation. Also avoid contraction 'it's' in formal responses if preferred; use 'it is'. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'means of transportation'.

× So that's why we use most of bikes in our country.

✓ So that is why we use most bikes in our country.

The phrase 'most of bikes' is incorrect; with plural countable nouns use 'most bikes' or 'most of the bikes'. The contraction 'that's' expanded to 'that is' is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'most' directly with plural nouns or include a determiner after 'most of' (for example 'most of the bikes').