Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and possessives, and combine short fragmented ideas into 2–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, "when," "so," "and") and give one or two specific details (who gave it, why you liked it, how you used it).

예시: My parents bought a bicycle for me when I was twelve. I used to ride it to school every day, which made the journey much faster and more fun. I loved riding because it gave me freedom and helped me meet friends on the way.

제안: Clarify and organize your ideas: give a clear topic sentence about popularity, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Correct grammar (singular/plural, possessives) and replace unclear phrases (e.g., "their speech is average") with meaningful points (e.g., "affordable," "good for short trips"). Use linking words like "because," "for example," and "also."

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and practical. For example, older people often use bikes for short errands, and parents let children ride to school when the route is safe. Also, many people prefer bikes for short commutes to avoid traffic.

× 'My parent My parent Wash my Bush a buy for me when I was 12 years old.'

✓ 'My parents bought a bike for me when I was 12 years old.'

'parent' should be plural 'parents' because the sentence repeats and implies more than one parent; 'Wash my Bush a buy' is ungrammatical and appears to be incorrect word order and word choice. Change to past tense 'bought' to match 'when I was 12 years old' (past reference) and replace 'Bush' with 'bike' which fits context. Suggestion: use correct noun (bike) and past-tense verb (bought) and pluralize parent to parents.'

× 'It's a rush.'

✓ 'It was a rush.'

'It's' (it is) is present tense but the student is describing a past experience. Use past tense 'it was' to match the time reference. Also 'rush' is informal and possibly incorrect collocation; consider 'It was exciting.' for clarity.'

× 'Bicycles.'

✓ 'It was a bicycle.'

'Bicycles' is a plural noun fragment that does not fit the singular context (the student refers to one bike). Make it a complete sentence with correct number: 'It was a bicycle.' or combine with previous sentence: 'It was an exciting bicycle.'.

× 'I try to ride it to my schools.'

✓ 'I tried to ride it to my school.'

'try' is present tense but the action happened in the past; change to past tense 'tried.' 'Schools' should be singular 'school' when referring to the student's own school. Also use 'ride it to my school.' Suggestion: match verb tense to time reference and use correct singular/plural noun.'

× 'I love it so much.'

✓ 'I loved it so much.'

The student is describing a past feeling about the bike. Use past tense 'loved' to match the surrounding past narrative. Otherwise, if they mean a present feeling, keep present tense but surrounding sentences are past, so past is more consistent.'

× 'Yes, bikes are popular in my country especially for the older person and the children's is safe for them.'

✓ 'Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially among older people, and they are safe for children.'

Several number and word-choice issues: 'older person' should be plural 'older people' when speaking generally. 'the children's is safe' is ungrammatical: 'children' is plural and should not take an apostrophe; use 'they are safe for children' or 'they are safe for the children.' Also 'especially among' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and correct pronoun references.'

× 'They can try it to the schools or go anywhere and their speech is average and they can limit it.'

✓ 'They can ride them to school or go anywhere, and their speed is moderate and they can control it.'

Multiple errors: 'try it to the schools' uses incorrect verb and preposition; use 'ride them to school' (pronoun agreement: 'them' refers to bikes; 'to school' is correct preposition). 'their speech is average' likely intends 'their speed is average'—'speech' is wrong word choice. 'they can limit it' is awkward; 'they can control it' or 'they can limit their speed' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct verbs and prepositions, correct vocabulary (speed), and ensure pronoun/noun agreement.