Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct word order and article use, and give a brief specific detail. For example, mention when and how you used it. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a black bicycle with large wheels, and I used it every afternoon to ride around my neighborhood with friends.

제안: Give a clear opinion, use linking words and accurate vocabulary. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., "no population"). Explain one or two specific reasons and, if possible, give an example or comparison. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and eco-friendly. For example, many people cycle to work to avoid traffic and reduce air pollution, which helps keep city air cleaner.

× Yes, I had one bike, uh, which is uh, which had two big wheels and black.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that had two big black wheels.

The original uses 'one bike' which is awkward; 'a bike' is natural (singular article). 'Which is uh, which had' is redundant and mixes present and past; use a single relative clause 'that had'. 'and black' incorrectly joins an adjective without a noun order; correct adjective order places 'black' before 'wheels' or as a compound adjective 'big black wheels'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use concise relative clauses and proper adjective order.

× Yes, of course, because bike bikes help us, uh, have uh, an environment, environment, environmental place and makes the atmosphere clean.

✓ Yes, of course, because bikes help us have a cleaner environment and make the air cleaner.

Plural noun should be 'bikes' (not 'bike bikes') and the verb must agree with the plural subject: 'bikes help' (correct) but the original then uses 'makes' which is singular; change to 'make' to match plural subject. 'Have a cleaner environment' is more natural than 'have an environment, environment, environmental place'. Use parallel structure: 'help us have... and make...'. Also replace vague 'atmosphere clean' with 'air cleaner'. Remove fillers. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement when switching clauses and use clear noun phrases.

× No population, no pollution yet no pollution.

✓ There was little pollution when many people used bikes.

The original fragment 'No population, no pollution yet no pollution' is ungrammatical and unclear. If the intended idea is that using bikes reduces pollution, express it in a complete sentence with correct subject-verb structure. 'There was little pollution' uses 'there' construction correctly and matches tense of discussion about the past or general fact. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure a subject and verb are present. Suggestion: form a concise sentence that clearly links cause and effect (e.g., 'Using bikes reduces pollution').