Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep your answer concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition and correct grammar (tenses, articles, and capitalization). For example, say when you had the bike, where you got it, and one activity you did with it. Use past tense consistently and link ideas with words like “then” or “so.”

예시: Yes. I got my first bike when I was eight. My dad and I bought it at Walmart; it was pink with sparkles. After that, my older brother and I often rode around the neighborhood with our friends.

제안: Answer directly and support with a clear reason and one or two specific examples. Avoid vague time references and incorrect words (e.g., “Pi bikes”). Use present simple for general statements and past simple for past situations. Link ideas with words like “however” or “previously.”

예시: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country now. Previously, around 2019, many people used bikes for short trips, but since then more people prefer cars and motorbikes, so cycling has declined.

× Yes I had a bike when I was 8 years old me and my dad went to Walmart and I like we went to the sections of the bikes and I got a pink bike with a lot of sparkles and me and my Big Brother we always go outside and play in the neighbors and we will play with the neighbors friends.

✓ Yes. I had a bike when I was 8 years old. My dad and I went to Walmart, we went to the bicycle section, and I got a pink bike with a lot of sparkles. My big brother and I always went outside to play with the neighbors and their children.

Multiple past-tense actions are described, so verbs should consistently be in the past tense (had, went, got, went, always went). The original sentence mixes tenses (present 'like', present 'go', future 'will play') and has run-on structure and pronoun order issues. Suggestions: split into shorter sentences, use past tense for all completed past actions, use 'My dad and I' (subject pronoun order) and 'my big brother and I', and use 'neighbors' children' or 'their children' for clarity.

× I like we went to the sections of the bikes

✓ We went to the bicycle section

The fragment 'I like we went' is ungrammatical; 'like' is used incorrectly. Also 'sections of the bikes' is awkward. Use a simple past verb phrase 'We went' and the noun 'bicycle section'. Suggestion: remove 'I like' and use 'bicycle section' for clarity.

× me and my dad went to Walmart

✓ My dad and I went to Walmart

Subject pronouns should be used in subject position. 'Me' is an object pronoun and incorrect as the subject. Also standard polite order places 'My dad and I' rather than 'I and my dad'. Suggestion: use 'My dad and I'.

× me and my Big Brother we always go outside and play in the neighbors and we will play with the neighbors friends

✓ My big brother and I always went outside to play with the neighbors and their children

Multiple pronoun issues: 'me' should be 'My big brother and I' as subject; 'we always go' mixes present with past narrative; 'play in the neighbors' is wrong preposition/possessive; 'neighbors friends' needs possessive 'neighbors' children' or 'their children'. Also 'will play' incorrectly uses future. Suggestion: use subject pronouns, correct preposition 'with', and past tense 'always went' to match past narrative.

× No, in my country bikes, bicycles are not popular anymore.

✓ No. In my country, bicycles are not popular anymore.

The sentence largely uses present tense correctly to state a current fact, but punctuation and redundancy needed fixing: 'bikes, bicycles' is repetitive; use one term and proper commas. Suggestion: write 'In my country, bicycles are not popular anymore.'

× Like we will say in 2019, yes in my country we had like a lot of popular bikes.

✓ For example, in 2019 my country had many popular bicycles.

The phrase 'Like we will say in 2019' incorrectly uses future 'will' and is awkward. The rest mixes colloquial 'like' and informal structure. Use past tense 'had' for 2019 and more precise quantifier 'many'. Suggestion: use 'For example' to introduce the example and 'had many popular bicycles.'

× But right now in 2026 my country doesn't have popular Pi bikes.

✓ But right now, in 2026, my country does not have popular bikes.

Contractions are acceptable but ensure clarity: 'doesn't have' -> 'does not have' formal. 'Pi bikes' seems to be a typo or unclear; replace with 'bikes'. Use present tense 'does not have' to state current situation. Suggestion: remove unclear word 'Pi' and use commas around 'in 2026'.