Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. For example, start: “Yes, I had a bike when I was five.” Then add a brief supporting detail: how you received it and how long you used it. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “then” or “after that.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was five. My parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I rode it every day for several years until I grew too tall.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid filler words and incorrect words (e.g., “bags” and “your”). Use vocabulary like “popular,” “common,” “commute,” or “exercise.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences. For example: “Yes, bikes are popular because they are cheap and good for health.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and to stay healthy. For example, I see people cycling to the market every morning to save money and exercise.

× Umm, honestly, when I'm uh, five years uh, old, I got the new umm umm, bike, uh, from my parents as they gave me for my birthday and uh, till the age, uh, till the age of my uh, five. I don't have my own uh, bike, uh, but I you.

✓ Umm, honestly, when I was five years old, I got a new bike from my parents for my birthday, and until the age of five I didn't have my own bike.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses ('I'm five years old' with past events) and contains redundant or conflicting clauses. Use past tense 'was' for age at a past time and 'didn't have' for not possessing something before that time. Simplify redundant phrases ('got the new bike' and 'as they gave me' into 'got a new bike from my parents'). Also replace 'till the age of my five' with 'until the age of five' for correct phrasing. Suggestion: Keep past events consistently in past tense and remove redundant fragments.

× Umm, yes, especially in my country bags, a lot of uh, people uh, use your bikes uh, to stay healthy.

✓ Umm, yes, especially in my country, a lot of people use bikes to stay healthy.

The original sentence has a misplaced word 'bags' and an incorrect pronoun 'your' referring to bikes, causing sentence structure and pronoun errors. Removing the extraneous word and using the correct noun 'bikes' keeps the meaning clear. Also remove filler words for fluency. Suggestion: Say 'in my country' followed by a comma, then the main clause 'a lot of people use bikes to stay healthy.'