Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable and relevant but has repetition, hesitations and short fragmented sentences. To improve: give a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea, add one specific detail (e.g., colour, who bought it, or how you used it), and connect ideas with a linking phrase. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and remove filler words like “umm” or repeated phrases.

예시: Yes. I had a small three-wheeled bike with a red basket at the back when I was about five. My parents bought it for me, and I rode it every afternoon near our house until I learned to balance on two wheels.

제안: Your idea is relevant but unclear and full of hesitations and a confusing final phrase. Improve by stating a clear opinion, supporting it with a specific reason and an example, and using linking words (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Avoid vague numbers or unfinished thoughts. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, in rural provinces many people use bicycles to commute to markets and schools since distances are short and fuel is costly.

× From what I can remember, I used to have a three wheel 3 wheeled bike when I was a child.

✓ From what I can remember, I used to have a three-wheeled bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'three wheel 3 wheeled' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use the past adjective form 'three-wheeled' (a compound adjective using the past participle) to describe the bike. Also remove the repeated numeric and word form. Suggestion: use hyphenated compound adjectives for clarity (three-wheeled bike).

× The one with a basket at the back.

✓ It was the one with a basket at the back.

This fragment lacks a finite verb, making it a sentence without a verb. Adding 'It was' completes the sentence and matches the past-tense context. Alternatively, combine with the previous sentence to avoid fragments.

× Yeah, it's like a training wheel.

✓ Yeah, it had training wheels.

'It's like a training wheel' is awkward and mismatches number (wheel vs wheels) and tense. In context describing a childhood bike, use past tense 'had' and plural 'training wheels' because most bikes have two training wheels. This corrects number agreement and tense.

× It's like a bike with the training wheels.

✓ It was a bike with training wheels.

Use past tense 'was' to match the time frame ('when I was a child') and remove the definite article 'the' before 'training wheels' unless referring to specific wheels already mentioned. Also avoid repeating similar statements; combine with previous sentence for clarity.

× I think so, since umm, most of the provinces here uses bikes as a mode of transportation, especially umm on provinces like ours where you can just usually umm, reach from .820.

✓ I think so, since most provinces here use bikes as a mode of transportation, especially in provinces like ours where you can usually get around easily.

There are several issues: subject-verb agreement ('provinces... use' not 'uses'), incorrect preposition ('on provinces' should be 'in provinces' or 'in provinces like ours'), awkward phrasing 'you can just usually umm, reach from .820' which seems incorrect; replaced with 'you can usually get around easily' to convey the intended meaning. Removed filler words and fixed verb forms and prepositions to match standard English.