Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the question and filler sounds (e.g., "uh"). Also correct grammar (use past tense consistently and say "we didn't have" instead of "we don't have" when referring to the past).

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Because my family had limited money, my parents prioritized essentials like schoolbooks and food, so they couldn't afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school or relied on public transport.

제안: Expand your answer with a clear reason and a specific example. Use a linking word to connect your topic sentence to supporting detail (for example, "because" or "for example"). Keep to a maximum of about three sentences for clarity and coherence.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people in my city use bicycles to commute to work or to go to the market, especially in areas where traffic is heavy.

× Uh, my answer is unfortunately no, because we don't have money to buy a bike.

✓ Uh, my answer is unfortunately no, because we didn't have money to buy a bike.

The question asks about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'don't have' for a past situation. Change to past tense 'didn't have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when referring to past circumstances (e.g., 'we didn't have enough money').

× The question is, did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ When the examiner asked, 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?', I answered no.

This line repeats the examiner's question as if the student is restating it; as a response, it is awkward and lacks clear structure. It also mixes narratives. Rephrase to clearly report the exchange or simply answer the question. Suggestion: either repeat the question in reported speech with past tense ('The examiner asked if I had a bike when I was a child') or answer directly ('No, I didn't').

× Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes were popular in my country when I was a child, and they are still popular now.

The original sentence is grammatically correct for a general statement, but given the context asking about popularity (which can be time-sensitive), clarify tense if needed. If speaking about the present, 'bikes are popular' is fine; if comparing past and present, explicitly state the time frame. Suggestion: keep present simple for general truths ('Bikes are popular in my country') or specify time ('were popular when I was a child').