Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence variety, avoid redundancy, and make the response more concise and natural. Correct the phrase “did used to” to either “used to” or “did…use to” (best: “I used to have a bike”). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word (e.g., “and” or “because”). Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences and remove filler words like “yeah.”

예시: I used to have a pink bike with a Minnie Mouse design when I was a child. My uncle taught me how to ride it, so I learned to balance and pedal confidently by the age of six.

제안: Make the answer clearer and more precise, avoid repetition and hesitation, and finish your thought. Start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because” and “also”). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “fuel prices” or “cost of living”) and complete the final point (e.g., “improve mobility” or “benefit health”).

예시: Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in my country because rising fuel prices have made driving more expensive. Also, many people choose cycling for health benefits and to avoid traffic, so overall cycling is seen as an economical and practical option.

× I did used to have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence incorrectly combines the auxiliary 'did' with the past form 'used'. When expressing a past habit, use 'used to' without the auxiliary 'did'. Using 'did used to' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: say 'I used to...' for past habitual actions.

× My uncle taught me how to ride a bike when I was a kid and I remember my bike being pink and had a Minnie Mouse design on it.

✓ My uncle taught me how to ride a bike when I was a kid, and I remember my bike being pink and having a Minnie Mouse design on it.

There is a parallelism error and incorrect coordination of verb forms. After 'I remember' the verb should be in the -ing form to match 'being' (a gerund), so use 'having' rather than 'had'. Also add a comma before 'and' linking two independent clauses. Suggestion: keep verb forms parallel after 'remember' by using gerunds: 'remember my bike being... and having...'.

× I do think bikes are very popular in my country right now because of the increase of gas prices in the recent, uh, inflation because of the war.

✓ I do think bikes are very popular in my country right now because of the recent increase in gas prices and inflation due to the war.

'Increase of gas prices' is less natural than 'increase in gas prices'; 'in the recent, uh, inflation' is awkward and repetitive. Use 'recent increase in gas prices and inflation' and 'due to the war' is a clearer prepositional phrase than 'because of the war' placed later. Suggestion: use 'increase in' for price rises and place modifiers in a clear, concise order.

× I think bikes could lessen the use of gas and also improve.

✓ I think bikes could reduce gas consumption and also improve mobility.

The phrase 'lessen the use of gas' is grammatical but awkward; 'reduce gas consumption' is more natural. The verb 'improve' needs an object—improve what? Adding 'mobility' or 'transport options' completes the idea. Suggestion: always provide a clear object for 'improve' and choose concise verbs such as 'reduce' for 'lessen'.