Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past simple correctly, avoid filler sounds, and add one or two concise supporting details with linking words. Be specific about feelings or reasons. For example, use: “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I really wanted one and often watched other children ride.”

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I really wanted one and would often watch other kids ride in the park, which made me more determined to learn to ride when I grew older.

제안: Improve accuracy, vocabulary and coherence. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, use correct nouns (bikes), and connect supporting reasons with linking words (for example, because, moreover). Give one specific example rather than vague statements. Reduce hesitations. For example: “Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children receive them as birthday gifts, and parents encourage cycling as a healthy activity.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children receive bicycles as birthday presents, and schools and parents often encourage cycling for exercise. For instance, my neighbour’s son got a bike for his tenth birthday and now rides to school every day.

× Oh no, I don't have bike when I was child because we live very poor and my parents, umm, don't have any uh, options to buy for me bike but I want I wish it.

✓ Oh no, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because we were very poor and my parents didn't have any options to buy me a bike, but I wanted one.

Multiple errors combined: 1) Tense: The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'didn't have' instead of 'don't have' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5: Past tense issue). 2) Article: 'bike' needs the indefinite article 'a' (Grammar Problem Type ID 22: Article errors). 3) Time expression: 'when I was child' needs 'a child' (Article error, ID 22). 4) Verb tense and agreement: 'we live very poor' should be past 'we were very poor' (ID 6: Present tense issue and ID 5: Past tense issue). 5) Parents negative: 'don't have any ... to buy for me bike' should be 'didn't have any options to buy me a bike' — use past tense and correct word order; remove unnecessary 'for' (ID 5 Past tense; ID 11 Incorrect prepositions). 6) Expression of desire: 'but I want I wish it' should be past 'but I wanted one' (ID 5 Past tense issue and ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: Keep all verbs in past tense to match 'when you were a child', use articles before singular countable nouns, use correct word order 'buy me a bike', and use simple past for wishes in the past ('I wanted one').

× Uh, yes, I think the bags is very popular in uh, my country because, uh, there are a lot of child wish uh, bikes for uh, his birthday and umm. My friend showed up to help.

✓ Uh, yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children wish for bikes for their birthdays, and my friend helped me.

Errors and fixes: 1) Singular/plural and subject-verb agreement: 'the bags is' is wrong. The intended word is 'bikes' (plural) and verb must agree: 'bikes are' (ID 1 Singular and plural issue; ID 27 Subject-verb agreement errors). 2) Article and noun: 'a lot of child' should be 'many children' or 'a lot of children' (ID 22 Article errors; ID 1 Singular and plural). 3) Verb phrase and preposition: 'wish uh, bikes for uh, his birthday' should be 'wish for bikes for their birthdays' or 'wish for bikes for their birthday' — corrected to 'wish for bikes for their birthdays' for general statement; also changed pronoun 'his' to 'their' to match plural 'children' (ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns; ID 11 Incorrect use of prepositions). 4) Tense and clarity: 'My friend showed up to help' is awkward; if referring to past help, use 'my friend helped me' or 'my friend lent a hand' (ID 5 Past tense issue; ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: Use plural nouns and matching plural verbs, use 'wish for' when expressing desire, use plural pronouns to agree with plural nouns, and choose clearer phrasing for help ('helped me').