Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, cohesion and fluency. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and relative clause use, and avoid short, clipped fragments. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas and add a specific detail to make the memory more vivid. Keep answers concise (up to 5 sentences).

예시: I did — I had a red bicycle when I was about six or seven. Every summer my family visited our village, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood with my friends and cousins. My favorite route ran from our house down to the river, where we would pause to watch ducks and skip stones. I really miss those carefree days.

제안: Make answers more natural and precise, avoid exaggerated claims, and use linking words to contrast seasons and usage. Provide a brief reason or example about infrastructure or habits to support your opinion. Correct small grammatical issues (e.g., articles and plural agreement).

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country — I’d say many households own at least one. However, because we have snowy winters and wet autumns, most people only cycle regularly during the warmer months. For example, city parks and bike lanes are crowded in summer but almost empty in December.

× Yes, it was a red bike, what I had when I was six or seven years old.

✓ Yes, it was a red bike that I had when I was six or seven years old.

The original sentence uses 'what' incorrectly as a relative pronoun. English requires 'that' or 'which' to introduce a defining relative clause modifying 'bike'. Use 'that' for restrictive clauses: 'a red bike that I had...'. This fixes the sentence structure and makes the clause grammatically correct.

× I truly miss.

✓ I truly miss it.

The verb 'miss' is transitive and requires an object to indicate what is missed. The original sentence omits the object. Adding 'it' (referring to the bike or those days) completes the sentence. Alternatively, specify the object: 'I truly miss those days.'

× Yes, in my opinion, bicycles are very common in my country.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, bicycles are very common in my country.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. (Included for completeness: no article error present.)

× I think every second person owns one.

✓ I think every other person owns one.

The phrase 'every second person' is a literal translation from some languages but is non-idiomatic in English. Use 'every other person' or 'one in every two people' to express the idea that roughly half of people own one. This improves naturalness and clarity.

× However, we have snowy winter, rainy autumns and we can use bicycles only in summer.

✓ However, we have snowy winters and rainy autumns, so we can use bicycles only in summer.

The original mixes singular and plural ('snowy winter' vs 'rainy autumns') and has a run-on feel. Use plural 'snowy winters' to match 'rainy autumns', and connect the clauses logically with 'so' to show consequence. This corrects noun number agreement and improves sentence flow.