Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm) and repetitions, and add one or two specific details with a linking word. Keep the answer under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child. It had training wheels to help me balance, and I used it to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and one example; use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid filler words. Limit to up to five sentences.

예시: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because public transport and cars are more convenient. For example, most people prefer driving to work, so only enthusiasts cycle for exercise or leisure.

× Uh hello, what's up uh should I answer this? Did you have a bike when you were a child? Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and uh, it was a very small umm, bike with uh wheels on the sides and uh, which helps you uh, to balance yourself uh, along your biking and uh, it was very.

✓ Hello. Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a very small bike with training wheels on the sides that helped me balance while riding, and it was very special to me.

The original utterance contains disfluencies, run-on fragments and incomplete sentence endings that make the structure unclear. Simplify into clear sentences, remove filler words (uh, umm), use correct noun phrase 'training wheels', use past-tense verb 'helped' to match 'I had', and complete the final clause ('very special to me'). Suggest speaking in short, complete sentences and avoid filler words.

× Uh, actually, no. Uh, bikes are not popular in my country and uh, not all people use them or have them and you should be, you must be a bike enthusiast to have a bike.

✓ Actually, no. Bikes are not very popular in my country, and not many people use or own them; you have to be a bike enthusiast to own one.

Use present simple to state general facts: 'are not very popular'. 'Not all people' is awkward; use 'not many people'. Use consistent verbs: 'use or own' rather than 'use them or have them'. Replace 'you should be, you must be' with one modal 'have to' for clarity. Advice: use concise, natural collocations and avoid hesitation markers.

× Uh, people don't use it for transportation. It's something of, uh.

✓ People don't use bikes for transportation. It's more of a recreational activity.

Pronoun 'it' is ambiguous; use the noun 'bikes' for clarity. The phrase 'It's something of' is incomplete; provide a complete noun phrase such as 'more of a recreational activity'. Suggest completing thoughts and using clear referents for pronouns.