Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid fillers and repetition, and use a clear tense and structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No or short statement), then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct tense consistency (past simple) and fewer hesitations will improve fluency and coherence.

예시: I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. Instead, I often went to my neighbour’s house and shared their bike because my parents were busy with work. As a result, I learned to ride by borrowing rather than owning one.

제안: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore, so). Include one concrete detail (e.g., short distances, traffic, cost) to support your view and finish with a short consequence or example.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller cities. This is because distances are short and traffic can be heavy, so many people find bikes convenient and inexpensive. For example, my neighbours often use bicycles to go to work or the market.

× Well, you know, I, I, I didn't have a bike when I was quite little and you know, my, my parents really were busy with their work and so I always went to my neighborhoods home and then I will, I would share the bike with them.

✓ Well, you know, I didn't have a bike when I was quite little, and my parents were really busy with their work, so I always went to my neighborhood's home and then I would share the bike with them.

The sentence mixes past and non-past forms and contains tense inconsistency. Use simple past consistently for past events: 'didn't have' and 'were' are correct; 'always went' is past, and the conditional 'would share' is acceptable to describe habitual past actions but 'will' is incorrect because it is a future marker. Also correct 'neighborhoods' to the possessive 'neighborhood's'. Suggestion: remove filler repetitions and 'will', keep simple past or 'would' for habitual past (e.g., 'I would share the bike with them').

× Umm, well, in my opinion, bikes are quite popular in my country umm, especially where I live in umm, since uh, uh, since you know, bikes are quite convenient and uh umm, the place where I live in in is not very large it's uh.

✓ Well, in my opinion, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially where I live, since bikes are quite convenient and the place where I live is not very large.

The sentence contains redundant and incorrect prepositional endings 'where I live in' (the preposition 'in' is unnecessary after 'live' when followed by a clause) and a duplicated 'in in'. Remove extra fillers and use 'where I live' or 'in the place where I live'. Also remove repeated words and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: avoid ending clauses with unnecessary prepositions and reduce fillers to make the sentence clearer.