Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, add one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetitive or unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'so' or 'however' to connect ideas. Also correct verb forms (had, took, taught) and clarify the final point.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My dad took me to the park every Sunday and taught me how to ride. At first he showed me the basics, but later I realised he wasn’t very confident teaching tricks, so I practised on my own.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then give specific supporting details and use appropriate vocabulary. Avoid filler words and unclear place names; correct collocations (ride a bicycle, popular in). Use linking words such as 'for example' and 'because' properly. Mention specific locations or occasions accurately and limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Hong Kong. For example, many people ride bicycles in parks and along waterfront promenades at weekends because cycling is a convenient and healthy way to exercise.

× Yes I have a bike when I was a child and my dad always take me to the park like every Sunday and he will teach me how to bike lane.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and my dad always took me to the park every Sunday and taught me how to ride a bicycle.

Tense inconsistency: 'have' should be past tense 'had' because the time reference is 'when I was a child.' 'Take' should be past 'took' to match past habitual action. 'Will teach' is inappropriate for a past habitual event and should be 'taught.' Also 'bike lane' is incorrect in context; the verb is 'ride' and the noun is 'a bicycle.' Use consistent past tense for events that happened in the past and choose correct verb collocations (ride a bicycle). Suggestions: keep all verbs in past when describing past habits and use correct verb+noun collocations (ride a bicycle).

× But and lastly I found that he didn't know how to play with the bicycle.

✓ But finally I found that he didn't know how to ride a bicycle.

Word choice and redundancy: 'play with the bicycle' is unnatural; the correct collocation is 'ride a bicycle.' 'But and lastly' is redundant; use 'But finally' or 'Finally.' The tense 'didn't know' is correct past tense, so keep it. Suggestion: use natural collocations (ride a bicycle) and avoid redundant conjunctions.'

× Yes, I think playing bicycle is con is popular in Hong Kong for example, we can see so many people they will umm, ride a bicycle like every Sunday in Zheng Guango or like timing took.

✓ Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in Hong Kong. For example, we can see many people riding bicycles almost every Sunday in Chengguan or at parks.

Multiple issues: 'playing bicycle' is incorrect — use the noun 'cycling' or verb phrase 'riding bicycles.' 'is con is popular' appears to be garbled; replace with 'is quite popular.' 'So many people they will umm, ride a bicycle' has a redundant subject 'they' and awkward future 'will' for habitual actions; use present simple or present continuous for general statements: 'many people ride bicycles' or 'many people are riding bicycles.' 'Zheng Guango' seems to be a place name spelled incorrectly; I used 'Chengguan' as a plausible correction but confirm the correct place name. Also 'like timing took' is unclear and removed. Suggestions: use correct nouns (cycling), avoid filler words, remove redundant pronouns, and use simple present for general truths (cycling is popular; people ride bicycles).