Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense consistently, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences). For example, correct tense errors (I had, not I have), use verbs like "gave me" for gifts, and mention where you rode it or a memory to enrich your answer.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a black bicycle that my parents gave me for my tenth birthday. I often rode it to the park near our house, and I remember learning to balance without training wheels within a week.

제안: Make your opinion clear with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers, and support your view with specific reasons and a linking word. For example, say whether bikes are popular overall, then explain seasonal or cultural factors and give a brief comparison or example.

예시: Not very popular overall, mainly because the climate discourages cycling. For instance, during the hot summer months many people avoid outdoor activities like bike riding, and instead prefer indoor transport or air-conditioned buses. However, cycling is more common in cooler regions or for sport and exercise.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use the past simple 'had' to match the past time. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for events in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child').

× Uh, it is a black bicycle that my parents put me in my 10th birthday.

✓ It was a black bicycle that my parents gave me for my 10th birthday.

Several issues: tense should be past ('was' not 'is') to match 'when I was a child'; the verb 'put' is incorrect in this context — the correct verb is 'gave'; the preposition and noun phrase should be 'for my 10th birthday'. Suggestion: Use 'gave me for my 10th birthday' and past tense 'It was'.

× I'm not really, but umm, because it's hot.

✓ I'm not really sure, but I think people prefer not to ride because it's hot.

The original fragment 'I'm not really, but umm' is incomplete and lacks a clear verb or object. It also doesn't directly answer the question about bike popularity. Suggestion: Complete the thought with a verb phrase such as 'I'm not really sure' and follow with a clear reason 'people prefer not to ride because it's hot.'

× In summer it's so hot so not everyone can go to the park and play with bicycles.

✓ In summer it's so hot that not everyone can go to the park and ride bicycles.

The sentence structure is mostly understandable but 'so... so' is incorrect; use 'so... that' for result clauses. Also 'play with bicycles' is unnatural; use 'ride bicycles'. Suggestion: Use 'so... that' and the verb 'ride' for bicycles.