Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details that are coherent and accurate. Avoid unrelated or unclear sentences (e.g., about writing a bike) and limit your answer to no more than five sentences. Use linking words (for example, because or when) to connect ideas and include specific details such as who taught you, where you rode, or how you felt.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started learning to ride when I was about seven, and my father taught me in the park near our home. I rode it every afternoon to play with friends, which helped me feel confident and independent.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific, accurate details. Correct factual mistakes (Tehran is in Iran) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, for instance, and therefore) and include examples such as where people ride bikes and why they are popular (health, tourism, environment). Keep to two or three sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in Thailand because many people use them for short trips and for sightseeing. For example, in Bangkok and tourist areas like Chiang Mai you often see people cycling around markets and temples, partly because it is cheap and good for exercise.

× Yes, I used to ride a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to ride a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses 'used to' to describe a habitual past action.

× At that time I was around 7 years old.

✓ At that time I was around 7 years old.

No correction needed; past-tense 'was' correctly matches the time reference.

× I need to write in order to use for my schools project, so I have to Start learning how to write a bike.

✓ I needed to write for my school project, so I had to start learning how to ride a bike.

Errors: tense, word choice, capitalization, possessive and verb selection. Based on context (childhood) the past tense is required ('needed', 'had to'). 'schools' should be possessive singular 'school' as part of 'school project'. 'Start' should be lowercase. 'write a bike' is incorrect verb choice; correct is 'ride a bike'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events, use correct noun forms and verbs that match meaning.

× Yes, I think bites are popular in my country, which is Thailand because I can see many people ride a bike, ride bikes around the famous place and around famous tourist attractions in Tehran.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, Thailand, because I can see many people riding bikes around famous places and tourist attractions.

Errors: spelling ('bites' -> 'bikes'), redundant relative clause punctuation and word order, inconsistent verb forms. Use 'riding' (gerund) after 'see' to indicate ongoing action. 'famous place' should be plural 'famous places'. Removed incorrect city 'Tehran' if referring to Thailand; if intended, replace with correct city. Suggestion: check spelling, ensure correct gerund after perception verbs (see/hear), keep noun number consistent.

× All of the.

✓ (Sentence omitted or clarify intention, e.g., 'That's all.' or 'All of them do.' )

Fragment: 'All of the.' is incomplete and lacks a noun or clause. This is a sentence structure/preposition use error. Suggestion: complete the thought by adding the noun ('all of them') or use a complete closing phrase like 'That's all.'