Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choice (use "ride" not "drive"). Correct grammar (past tense forms and articles) and segment ideas into shorter sentences to improve clarity.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small children's bike my sister gave me, so it often looked like a big person riding a tiny bike. Because it was too small, I only just learned how to ride it by myself.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence followed by specific, well-linked reasons. Reduce fillers like "uh" and avoid repetition. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "cycle" or "bicycle lanes") and mention specific examples or comparisons to support your point.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, in my city many people commute by bike because there are dedicated bicycle lanes and wide roads, so cycling is convenient and affordable.

× Yes, I had a bike only one time though and my sister gave that back to me and it was a bit smaller than my body so it looked like a big person riding a small bike, children's bike and I barely learned how to drive ride a bike by myself.

✓ Yes, I had a bike only once, though. My sister gave it back to me, and it was a bit small for my body, so it looked like a grown person riding a child's bike, and I barely learned how to ride a bike by myself.

Multiple past-tense actions are described, so verbs and adverbs should be in correct past-tense forms and appropriate word choices. 'Only one time' is awkward; 'once' is more natural. 'Gave that back to me' should be 'gave it back to me' (pronoun choice). 'Smaller than my body' is awkward; 'small for my body' or 'a bit small for me' is correct. 'Big person' is informal; 'grown person' or 'adult' is clearer. 'Children's bike' needs possessive form and placement: 'a child's bike'. 'Drive ride a bike' contains an extra verb 'drive'; only 'ride' is needed. Use commas and sentence breaks to avoid run-on sentence.

× Yes, I think so. Bikes are very popular in my country because wherever I go, you could see people riding a bike all around the streets and they love to ride a bike because, uh, our, my city has a lot of road for bikes.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are very popular in my country because wherever I go, I can see people riding bikes all around the streets, and they love to ride bikes because my city has a lot of bike lanes.

'Could' is not the best choice for a general present observation; 'can' or 'I see' is more natural in present tense. Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Riding a bike all around the streets' is awkward; 'riding bikes all around the streets' is better. The phrase 'our, my city' is redundant; use 'my city'. 'A lot of road for bikes' is ungrammatical; use 'a lot of bike lanes' or 'many roads for bikes'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.