Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and tense errors. Use linking words (for example, "and" or "so") only when needed. Correct common mistakes like double words, subject/object placement, and past tense forms.

예시: Yes. My father bought me my first bicycle when I was eight, and I was very excited. I learned to ride it in our neighborhood park, and my mother took a photo to celebrate. It was a memorable gift because it gave me more independence.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific, well-formed reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "manufacturers", "fuel-efficient", "reliable"). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for city traffic. For example, brands like Hero and Honda are widely used since they are reliable and fuel-efficient. I personally prefer Honda because their bikes give good mileage and require less maintenance.

× Yes, when I I remember that when I was a child I my father bought me a cycle for me and that time I was very happy because that first time I drive my own cycle and that time my mother also took a picture and post on Instagram.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was a child my father bought a bicycle for me, and I was very happy because it was the first time I rode my own bicycle; my mother also took a picture and posted it on Instagram.

Multiple sentence structure problems: redundant words ('I I', 'that when', 'my father bought me a cycle for me'), missing/misused verbs and incorrect verb forms ('drive' should be past 'rode', 'post' should be past 'posted'), and run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation. To improve, remove repetitions, use 'bicycle' or 'bike' consistently, use past simple for completed past events (remembered, bought, was, rode, took, posted), and break into clearer clauses or use punctuation to separate ideas. Suggested practice: read and rewrite long sentences into shorter ones, check verb tenses for past events, and eliminate redundant words.

× Yes, in my country bikes are very popular. Lot of company makes bikes like Hero and Honda, Honda's bike.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are very popular. Lots of companies make bikes, such as Hero and Honda.

Errors: 'Lot of company' is incorrect in number and count noun form; should be plural 'Lots of companies' or 'A lot of companies'. 'Makes' vs 'make' must agree with plural subject 'companies'. Also 'Honda's bike' is awkward. Improve by using plural nouns for general statements and matching verb form: 'companies make'. Suggested practice: identify singular vs plural nouns and ensure verbs match the subject.

× I like Honda's bike because Honda company make a bike more reliable and more easy accessible bike and there give more mileage than other bikes.

✓ I like Honda bikes because the Honda company makes bikes that are more reliable, easier to access, and give more mileage than other bikes.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('Honda company make' should be 'the Honda company makes'); awkward possessive and count usage ('Honda's bike' -> 'Honda bikes' or 'the Honda company'); incorrect adjective/adverb form and order ('more easy accessible' should be 'easier to access' or 'more easily accessible'); 'there give' is incorrect — should be 'give'. Use comparative structure 'more reliable' and 'easier to access'. Suggested practice: watch verb agreement, use comparative adjective forms (easier), and prefer clear noun phrases (Honda bikes or the Honda company makes bikes).