Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and be slightly more specific. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Use linking words to add one concrete detail or example. Also correct vocabulary (use 'bike' or 'bicycle', not 'bikers').

예시: Yes, I did — I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was an old blue bike that I often rode with my cousins, and we would race around the park every weekend. Because of those rides, I have very fond memories of spending time outdoors with my family.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, fix grammar and hesitations, and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because, as a result) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are becoming more popular in my country. For example, many new bike parks and dedicated lanes have appeared in our neighborhoods, so both children and adults now cycle more for leisure and commuting. As a result, cycling is becoming a common daytime activity for families.

× Yes, actually enjoyed riding my bikers.

✓ Yes, I actually enjoyed riding my bike.

Missing subject 'I' and incorrect noun 'bikers' used instead of 'bike'. This is a sentence structure error because the verb lacks its subject and the wrong noun form was chosen. Suggestion: always include the subject before the verb and use 'bike' for the thing you ride; 'bikers' refers to people who ride bikes.

× It is the time when we bond with my cousins and that's a really great part of my childhood.

✓ It was a time when I bonded with my cousins, and that was a really great part of my childhood.

Tense mismatch and incorrect pronoun reference create a preposition/tense issue. The question asked about the past, so use past tense 'was' and 'bonded' instead of present. Also 'we bond with my cousins' is awkward; use 'I bonded with my cousins' to match the subject. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame and keep subject consistent.

× I think it is now 'cause right now, uh, several bike parks already in our neighborhood.

✓ I think they are popular now because several bike parks are already in our neighborhood.

Missing verb 'are' and inconsistent subject. The student used present reference but omitted 'are' after 'parks'. Also 'it is now' is vague; use 'they are popular now' to refer to bikes. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'to be' for plural subjects and make the subject clear.

× So kids and as well as adults, uh, get you get used to ride their bikes there and enjoy the, the daytime.

✓ So kids as well as adults get used to riding their bikes there and enjoy the daytime.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'get you get' is redundant and incorrect; remove 'you'. Use the gerund 'riding' after 'get used to'. 'Their' is acceptable for plural possessive. Suggestion: remove extra words, use 'get used to' + verb-ing, and keep pronouns consistent with the plural subject.