Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 이해는 되지만 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현, 중복이 있습니다. 먼저 한 문장에서 과거 소유를 표현할 때는 'I had a bike'로 충분합니다. 이어지는 문장은 과거 경험을 자연스럽게 설명하도록 시제를와 구문을 바로잡아야 합니다. 예를 들어 'I remember learning to ride with my dad when I was in kindergarten'처럼 능동적이고 간결하게 말하세요. 또한 불필요한 반복(‘had a bike’ 반복)을 피하고, 연결어(for example, when)를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하세요.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember learning to ride it with my dad when I was in kindergarten, and he would hold the seat until I gained confidence.

제안: 문장이 매우 혼란스럽고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 먼저 질문에 직접적으로 답하는 주제문을 만드세요(e.g. 'Yes, I think bikes are popular in South Korea'). 그 다음 이유와 구체적 예시를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이되, 연결어(because, especially, for example)를 사용하세요. 모호한 단어(예: Adam)나 반복된 발화를 피하고, 도시 환경, 공유 자전거 서비스 등 구체적 이유를 제시하세요.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in South Korea, especially in cities. For example, many cities have bike-sharing services and dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling a convenient option for short trips.

× I had a memory of starting to had a bike with my dad from when I was in the kindergarten.

✓ I have a memory of starting to have a bike with my dad from when I was in kindergarten.

The student used the past tense 'had' incorrectly after 'starting to'. After 'start to' we use the base form of the verb (infinitive without to) or 'start + -ing'. Also, the present perfect 'have a memory' is more natural when referring to a lasting memory. Suggestion: use 'I have a memory of starting to have a bike' or 'I remember starting to have a bike' and omit the article before 'kindergarten'. Note: explanation in English as requested.

× But I think what's very popular in my country, it's in South Korea because only South Korea, especially in total city.

✓ I think biking is very popular in my country, especially in South Korea's cities.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains redundancy ('what's very popular' and 'it's in South Korea') and incorrect word order ('especially in total city'). Correct the sentence to a clear subject and predicate: 'biking is very popular'. Use 'cities' rather than 'total city'. Suggestion: 'I think biking is very popular in my country, especially in cities.' Note: explanation in English as requested.

× Uh, so, so the service or by which which cause which are which is called Adam.

✓ Uh, so the service that causes this is called Adam.

The sentence contains repeated and incorrect relative pronouns ('which which cause which are which'). Use a single relative pronoun 'that' or 'which' appropriately, and place it after the noun it modifies ('the service'). Suggestion: simplify to 'the service that causes this is called Adam.' Note: explanation in English as requested.