Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, split into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details, and avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'and', 'so', 'which') and keep it to no more than five sentences. Also correct word order (e.g., 'my dad and I') and remove duplicate words ('during during').

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bike as a child, and I loved the feeling of the wind on my face when I rode it. My dad and I often cycled together on weekends, which became a cherished family memory.

제안: Eliminate hesitations and false starts, use clear sentence structure, and provide specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'people use bikes', 'instead of driving their cars') and be concise. Mention specific examples (bike sharing, cycling lanes) to support your opinion and avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetition.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular, especially in cities. For example, bike-sharing schemes and dedicated cycling lanes make it easy for people to use bikes for short trips instead of driving their cars.

× I had a bike when I was a child. I loved the feeling of the wind on my face during during the ride and me and my dad often went cycling together on weekends which became a cherished family memory in my childhood.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. I loved the feeling of the wind on my face during the ride, and my dad and I often went cycling together on weekends, which became a cherished family memory.

Errors: repeated word 'during during' (typo/redundant) and incorrect pronoun order 'me and my dad' (pronoun case and conventional order). Also run-on sentence lacking commas. Reasons: Use simple past tense consistently for past events (had, loved, went). Use 'my dad and I' as the subject of the clause, not 'me'. Add commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, change 'me and my dad' to 'my dad and I', and add commas before coordinating conjunction and before the nonrestrictive clause.'},{

× Yes, uh, I think, I think so Bike, uh, is, is every sure, uh, bike sharing is a popular culture in especially in the urban area of my country where people are used by you riding bike instead of walking or drive their car.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bike sharing is a popular trend, especially in urban areas of my country, where people are used to riding bikes instead of walking or driving their cars.

Errors: disfluent filler words and broken structure; incorrect phrase 'is every sure'; incorrect phrase 'popular culture in especially in the urban area'; incorrect preposition and verb forms 'used by you riding bike' and 'drive their car'. Reasons: Remove hesitations for clarity; use 'trend' or 'practice' rather than 'culture' if referring to widespread usage; use plural 'areas' and 'bikes' to match generalization; use 'used to' + verb-ing for habitual action; use 'driving' (gerund) to parallel 'riding' and plural 'cars' to agree with plural 'people'. Suggestion: Eliminate filler words, restructure sentence with clear subject and verb, use 'used to riding bikes' and 'driving their cars'.