Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence that correctly uses past tense (e.g., "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child"). Remove filler words like "uh" and finish the thought: explain what you meant by "I felt actually" (for example, say you fell off it, loved it, or used it often). Add one or two supporting details linked with a conjunction or sequencing word (e.g., "and", "because", "when"). Keep the answer concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school and around my neighborhood almost every day because it was my main way to get around. I loved riding with my friends on weekends, although I sometimes fell off when learning new tricks.

제안: Focus on clearer, more natural phrasing and add a specific reason or example. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "Bicycles are not very popular in my country"). Use linking words to add support (e.g., "because", "however", "for example"). Provide a specific reason and, if possible, a brief comparison or a prediction. Keep to 2–3 sentences for concision.

예시: Bicycles are not very popular in my country because most people prefer motorcycles for their speed and convenience. For example, many roads are long and hilly, so motorcycles are a more practical choice. However, cycling is slowly becoming more common in cities as people try to exercise more.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child, but uh, I felt actually.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but actually I sold it.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child', creating a tense inconsistency (Present tense issue). Use past simple 'had' to match the past time frame. Also 'felt' is likely a mistaken word; context suggests 'sold' (meaning disposed of) or another intended verb. I corrected to 'sold' to make a coherent past action. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions (use past simple with 'when I was a child') and choose the correct verb for the intended meaning (e.g., 'sold', 'lost', 'broke').

× Uh, not really. In my country it's not really popular, but motorcycle is more popular than bikes.

✓ Uh, not really. In my country they're not really popular, but motorcycles are more popular than bikes.

The original has a singular/plural mismatch. 'Bikes' is plural earlier, so the pronoun and comparative noun should be plural too. Change 'it's' to 'they're' to agree with plural 'bikes', and 'motorcycle' to plural 'motorcycles' to compare categories. Suggestion: ensure number agreement between subjects and verbs and keep noun forms consistent when making comparisons.